sunscreen

Member since December 29, 2009

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how dare you?

Posted Feb 20, 2013 · 15 lines · 2 critiques

How dare you compare me to him?
The one who ruined everything we had.
The manipulative selfish asshole.

After all I've forgiven
My heart you've stricken
You leave me smitten.

Selflessly I was there
my love I despair
Hatred I declare.

I'm still waiting here
Behind the setting sun
where we once stayed.

Close the door to the world
blind my existence
Leave me distraught and angry.

sunscreen’s timeline

December 2024
28 Sat

Anniversary
15 years of membership
December 2019
28 Sat

Anniversary
10 years of membership
December 2014
28 Sun

Anniversary
5 years of membership
February 2013
21 Thu

Received a critique
on how dare you? from @Frenchf
"Hopeless against the inevitable well expressed"
20 Wed

Received a critique
on how dare you? from @jzarmel
"I like the write. Descriptive in every way concerning heartache."
20 Wed

Posted a poem
how dare you?
"How dare you compare me to him?"
Open thread 15 lines
05 Tue

Received a critique
on Gut rage from @Ian.T
"Confusion:- a way of generating clean green energy from people that run in circles.. La La ,Yours Sparrow PS:- Much cheaper than that Nu clear fusion, that they are trying to make.."
01 Fri

Received a critique
on Gut rage from @scribbler
"A status message should be prefaced with * to avoid confusion.............stan"
01 Fri

Received a critique
on Gut rage from @themoonman
"We all write about our feelings and experiences, and poetry for most poets is a way to vent or even therapeutic, I know it helps keep me closer to what society calls sanity. When you are submitting a poem there is a blo…"
01 Fri

Received a critique
on Gut rage from @Ian.T
"Firstly welcome to Neopoet and I hope that we can learn from each other in all ways.. That you write or try to write in a different way to what you think many poets do, just sit back and read your words. Yes you can ven…"
01 Fri

Received a critique
on Gut rage from @scribbler
"Perhaps this is meant to capture that instant when rage takes over reason. i also wonder if last line is or isn't part of the poem...............stan"
01 Fri

Received a critique
on Gut rage from @themoonman
"Is that last line part of the poem? (I'm moving forward hoping for change, this madness and anger will fade) Your poem seems it has no beginning or end, seems you've taken up in the middle of something. You have some de…"
January 2013
27 Sun

Posted a poem
Lonesome
"Nights spent working"
Open thread 12 lines
December 2010
28 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
June 2010
22 Tue

Posted a poem
Emotion
"Feel it in you"
Open thread 17 lines
20 Sun

Posted a poem
Father
"The one who helped me swing,"
Open thread 10 lines
14 Mon

Critiqued
"Diminutive World" by @xena465
"You better be there in body TOO! or my big sad puppy eyes will be paying you a visit!"
14 Mon

Critiqued
"Jesus “Who Was He?”" by @xena465
"Agreed!"
14 Mon

Critiqued
"If I Were A Meadow" by @magics02
"I've been very busy with my loved one, so I have not been able to spend much time around a computer, we've been swimming, However we don't wear sunscreen, because its easier to tan if you get burned. I regret, that I co…"
14 Mon

Critiqued
"The Long Journey Home " by @Seren
"Indeed, but my invisibility cloak just loves to smother me lol, I did not receive any messages."
11 Fri

Critiqued
"Diminutive World" by @xena465
"Great write mom, hopefully your journey, will turn out to be the best (If you tend to go on one) But then again, WHY NOT?! So many places to be, and to see. I say go for it, you can even bring Zak a long!"
10 Thu

Critiqued
"Paranoia" by @Lonnie
"Ahhh lonnie, just the man I was thinking of, beer and chili. Anyways, great write I like it :)"
10 Thu

Critiqued
"1 a.m Ponderings" by @SophieHannah24
"You're a very deep individual, ever stop to think: you think too much? Haha joke. Anyways I like this a lot I do wonder such things, but for me usually the balance is always there. life is subject to balancing things ou…"
10 Thu

Critiqued
"Between Vandals and Gentlemen" by @whitetea
"You touch very sensitive subjects, and you do it some good. This poem? Fucking Brilliant, you've got me hooked, good job."
10 Thu

Posted a poem
Evil
"To lose myself"
Open thread 23 lines
May 2010
26 Wed

Posted a poem
Sterile
"Inability to create"
Open thread 21 lines
22 Sat

Posted a poem
I cried tonight
"Words spoken hurt"
Open thread 16 lines
18 Tue

Posted a poem
I'm sorry
"The pain I cause"
Open thread 19 lines
13 Thu

Posted a poem
Truth
"Reject Formality"
Open thread 25 lines
April 2010
29 Thu

Posted a poem
Unfogged
"My cloud has dissapeared"
Open thread 17 lines
25 Sun

Posted a poem
Collision
"Combination of force"
Open thread 22 lines
21 Wed

Posted a poem
Happiness
"Smiles you provoke"
Open thread 16 lines
15 Thu

Highest posting month
April 2010 — 8 poems
March 2010
23 Tue

Most-discussed work
L.o.v.e.

35 critiques to date.
December 2009
29 Tue

First critique offered
on "she is lost in a bottle" by @Aireal Steed
29 Tue

First publication
Let me be the one who blocks out the sun
28 Mon

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.