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Aireal Steed
Dec 24, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

she is lost in a bottle

She is lost in a bottle Oblivious from life A mom A daughter A sister A woman No she doesn’t care She is lost in the bottle A stroke at 15 She still has so much potential Her family they loves her But, It is getting hard to care about her. All my life she has pushed us away. Her daughter Her Son She doesn’t care All she does is drink that bottle Empty cans all over the floor Look in her dresser It is filled with them Rum, whiskey Scary little words She is killing herself But she doesn’t care She is lost in a bottle She hates reality So she made her own One where everything is ok Her family they’re all together Her arm works And everyone is all right So lost in reality She is pushing everyone away A mom A daughter A sister And a woman But she doesn’t care She is lost in her bottle Doesn’t care She is killing herself Her mom is going to lose her daughter Her kids are going to lose their mom The world is going to lose another woman But it doesn’t matter Because when she is lost in her bottle Everything is safe And everyone is ok.
— Aireal Steed, Dec 24, 2009

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Aireal Steed

16 years 5 months ago

well all I can say is thank

well all I can say is thank you. Your so kind have a good day, Aireal
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childof21

16 years 5 months ago

holy crap thats depressing-

holy crap thats depressing- as is most poetry, but that one espetialy. i thought my life was bad, but that poem put alot in prespective. thanks for sharing it...
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Aireal Steed

16 years 5 months ago

well your welcome. I have a

well your welcome. I have a lot of poetry on this site that has put many things in my life in prespective. I like to look at it as a form of therapy. But, thank you for reading it. =] yours, Aireal Steed
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 5 months ago

My father [was]...

an alcoholic. Notice I say was. Your cry is heard. You can't make her care, so get yourself some counseling. My sympathies and understanding also. BTW Your poem was great, needs just one tweak. Use safe instead of[ save.] And Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer
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Aireal Steed

16 years 5 months ago

I guess I have come to that

I guess I have come to that conclusion in my life, and I guess using safe instead of save would be accurate. Thanks! have a nice day! Aireal Steed
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HiddenNotebook

16 years 5 months ago

Wow

The last lines are so haunting they will stay with me.. Wow
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Aireal Steed

I was shattered by your ending ... this is an incredible write ... something I have been lucky enough not to have touch my life ... though I know people that have struggled this puts it in a way,that my mind finds hard to contemplate ... but did and was near to tears ... brilliant write ... welcome to the site I look forward to reading more from your pen kind regards Jayne
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Aireal Steed

16 years 5 months ago

thank you so much for your

thank you so much for your considerate compliment. It means a lot. yours truly, Aireal Steed
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years 5 months ago

I was first!

Even though I was the first to hear this my dearest friend. I believe that its a lot more meaningful written then said, because you have time to think about it, and compare circumstances. I do hope that she steps out of her bubble, and gains control, for you, and your brother.
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Aireal Steed

16 years 5 months ago

honestly I don’t believe

honestly I don't believe she ever will. But, I guess she is my mother so I will never stop hoping. I just don't trust her like a daughter should trust her mom. It will be ok though. Thank you for reading my work. I hope you have a good day! Aireal Steed
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Aireal Steed

16 years 5 months ago

I hope one day she will,

I hope one day she will, thank darknlovely. You really do have lovely sentiments. have a nice day! Aireal Steed