Your hero

idk I like it. I think the first line comes from your other poem, and who did you write this about?

First of all: Happy New Year! Dear sunblocker, the alignment of this one looks much better, without a doubt. Do you use spell check? I am going to leave a straightened-out version below, alterations in (parentheses). Please do tackle spelling and punctuation, many of your fellow poets will not even bother to read a poem with a lot of typos in it. Let me take the strides of life and block your sun for (a while), let me take the (seriousness) from your face(,) let me save you from yourself. Take back the hand you extend(,) for this isn’t about me(,) it(')s about you. It(')s taken, it('s) turned, it(')s said in too many different ways, I intend to say it without having said it at all. I take deep breaths when you’re (in sight), you steal my air away. I stand by(,) ready to be at hand to be useful, I hold you close(,) secure(,) making sure that the outside doesn’t come in. I watch like an eagle, I can tell how you feel, before you say anything. You are a reason I remain to be sane. The security you provide catches me when I’ve fallen. I don’t understand why stuff happens so much but it does, and when it does you can always count on me. I want to help you fight the war inside yourself. I know that it(')s only you that can win(,) I want to provide the feelings that make it go away. I want to show you how much I would do for you, I don’t expect a lot (, in fact,) just to see your smile. It overwhelms me with joy, I take the steps, and respect you for who you are. I’ve never wanted anything in return for what I do, it(')s just how I am. Let me be the one who strikes down your fears, the one who (ensures) your safety, the one who can call you his, the one that can be there for you. Let me be your hero. A good way to decide if you want an apostrophe with e.g. its/it's would be to write it down without contractions. When its/it's cannot be made into it is or it has, you want "its", when it can, you want "it's". Works with your/you're and their/they're, too. Apart from that, this poem works well on several levels, e.g. you make good use of the inside/outside theme here. Yours, ~Nina

Happy New Year you Hero!! Yes I concur with Nina she has some great advice, which as I was reading was thinking the same lines as her. Other then the fix it uppers I liked this read and I thought it was sweet and heroic such a piece that you share for that someone you love I suppose. Keep on writing and be your own best hero in the New Year.. I shall come back to this one again.... Blessings from Florida Love, Magics02 xoxoxo