Happiness

Smiles you provoke
Laughs you erupt
Emotions you Influence.
Sad has vanished
Depressed no longer
Frowns forgotten.

Hand to hold
Lips to kiss
Body to touch.

Attached to you
Always in mind
Feeling profound.

Happiness I've found
Hope that it remains
Insanity without.

"You will never be happy if you continue to search for what happiness consists of. You will never live if you are looking for the meaning of life." Albert Camus

— sunscreen, Apr 21, 2010

Critiques

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Love is all you need

You just keep getting better and better Alex...love it. Rosina xena465

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you :) I wrote this

Thank you :) I wrote this for a very special person who has stomped my depression, and my sadness, she has truly shown me what I was missing I'm very happy now.

DawningDaytripper

16 years 3 months ago

I understand minimal words

I understand minimal words in poetry but I still think you need a few transitions to elavate your writing Sunscreen. Just my opinion and I appreaciate you sharing the start to a great write. Julie D.D.

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

The story it tells is quiet

The story it tells is quite clear to me, I guess not everyone has eyes like me, I'll see what i can do you make it more understandable.

Aireal Steed

16 years 3 months ago

BUT....

I do agree with D.D. I think the write would benefit more if the last line in the stanza transitioned to the next. It would make it flow more, but I do hear your voice in the poem. Your voice is defiantly your trademark. Something as simple as that you find in a lot of writers. I think if I was put to the task of figuring out which poem was yours out of like ten or twenty. I would be able to pick yours without me having to think twice about it. Keep going, Aireal Steed

Aireal Steed

16 years 3 months ago

hey Alex, It’s

hey Alex, It's Aireal I am not missing in action by the way. I like this poem, but I hope you are not setting yourself up. I think you have good intentions in your writing and that is what I like the most in your work. Love, Aireal Steed

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago