feeling betrayed

The knife you pushed in, pull it out
Wipe it clean as I bleed, and shout
You mock me giving a pout.

You pull away
Wondering why I asked to stay
push me right into the fray

Take that stick and beat me with it
Emotions bleed out from the throat you slit.
Turn on me, and spit.

Take back the things you gave
Take that blade to my heart, and shave
Turn to the road of betrayal you've cleverly paved.

Leave me, used, and betrayed.

— sunscreen, Jan 12, 2010

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Ink Dragon

16 years 4 months ago

Hi Sunblocker,

you are improving with every post. Only a few suggestions on this one: You mock me, giving me a pout. - push me, and I fall over in the hay. (is this here for rhyme's sake? I'd lose it. How about "push me right into the fray" or something like that?) - watch my emotions bleed from the throat you slit (?) - Yours, ~Nina

sunscreen

16 years 4 months ago

:)

Those are very good suggestions, I'll use them :)

Dark_Death

16 years 4 months ago

in dragon is right, but

in dragon is right, but still this is pretty good =)

sunscreen

16 years 4 months ago

thanks :)

It was wrote on a bad day, haha, feelings seem to make things better.