Diatom Shells

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A Handful of Sparrows

Posted Aug 9, 2012 · 31 lines · 9 critiques

I have opened my heart wide,
like a blanket being opened above a bed.
The constant kick in synch
with the music of your words,
So soft spilling like honey in the air.
A whisper...
A floating feather,
A single cotton petal sifting sorrow
with powder and bread.

Inner beauty...
Inner beauty...
Forgive me and forget it.

I have sown a song for you.
I will reap the rewards of a tune.

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A color not defined by light,
but by every sound that proceeds
from the mouth.
Singing is a web of bone-white vowels
laying naked in the spectrum on your tongue.

I met your angel last night.
He told me you created a note so wide,
you had to crack the surface of skin just to finish it.
Then I heard you fall and bend in half
like melting candlesticks.

Inner light...
Inner light...
Forgive me for forgetting it.

Do you remember the door
you came in the first time?
You took the spoil thereof
and sold it for two farthings.

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Received a critique
on A Handful of Sparrows from @Ian.T
"I have spent 55 years writing bits and pieces of all types and find this learning of form a hard job, and I really infuriate some of the masters sometimes lol :-) You just write each piece as you normally do then just t…"
10 Fri

Critiqued
"The World Outside My Shoes" by @Kailashana2
"I love the part about Lucifer and the translation of light bringer cracks me up everytime that Jerome translated it in the Latin Vulgate in some dripping cave in Isreal to be Lucifer when it was Halel or something like…"
10 Fri

Received a critique
on A Handful of Sparrows from @Dalton
"I don't agree with the science of poetry so to speak. To me its always been the emotion or feeling or personal message behind the words that mattered. Most of what I write comes out in a splurge. From where I know not…"
10 Fri

Received a critique
on A Handful of Sparrows from @Dalton
"i just think its a great change in style from the poems you posted to the old site which although were kind of short and snappy were on a biblical theme one way or another. Despite being beautiful that theme is what mad…"
10 Fri

Received a critique
on A Handful of Sparrows from @Kailashana2
"DIATOM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am pleased as punch to read you again. Hope all is well and can I say I missed you? Your work is on a very short stack of my beloved poets. I posted one of your poems (I forget where) with your…"
10 Fri

Received a critique
on A Handful of Sparrows from @Ian.T
"Love,y to have you return to us here, I hope that your travels away have been good for you. This poem is as I remember your ways deep thought, and beautiful feelings.. Not sure of the form but the words override a need…"
09 Thu

Received a critique
on A Handful of Sparrows from @Dalton
"First of all I remember you from the old site before the server crash and loved your poems then. So glad you are back on Neopoet. About the poem great what you have here but I think it needs tweaking. Its late so I'll a…"
09 Thu

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A Handful of Sparrows
"I have opened my heart wide,"
Open thread 31 lines
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Received a critique
on Fate Vs. Will from @whitescatter
"great work...it is important that in writing you have something that connects the readers with what your work is trying to imply or mean.. gratitude for that.. always take care^^ "i'm the kind of poet who likes to revol…"
03 Thu

Received a critique
on Fate Vs. Will from @Nordic cloud
"Ann of Norway Nice to see you Diatom Shells You spread the table with rich fruits and ornaments and the opulence of the atmosphere bristles with excitement and expectation, until you crush the shell's dream into a thous…"
01 Tue

Critiqued
"The Maiden & Her Lover:" by @Dalton
"What finesse Dalton! This was so smooth and buttery, it made my mouth water. I hesitate to know the mysteries of the piece. I already feel this poem in between my chest plate and the abyss. May all our unknowns follow u…"
01 Tue

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Fate Vs. Will
" The third fate wanders in the red-fisted forest."
Open thread 41 lines
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"I tilt back my head"
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14 Sun

Critiqued
"Isolated Me" by @whitescatter
"I found this to be full of passionate remarks where time and death coincide within each other. And of course loved this line, "only i fear to end up in such ghostly distress!!" well done!"
14 Sun

Critiqued
"A Taste for Life (revised)" by @Stefan
"This has got a ring to it I need to massage my empty heart so it doesn't starve to death from pure hunger, greed makes me want to vomit green all over corporate America's black tie I hope to never hunger for more than w…"
14 Sun

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"Cursed in Ink" by @Seren
"Stories are my friend and I think this is my best friend :) I really enjoyed this work thank you dear for giving me more I am lovin' the raw essence"
14 Sun

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"Throating "f"s" by @bjp
"This poem pasted a perma-grin on my face as I read this. I loved every wretched word. Please give me more I feel starved now or maybe it is addicted? Either way where have you been all my life you sweet albumen LOVE it!…"
14 Sun

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"We walked out of the garden."
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14 Sun

Critiqued
"Dream Catcher (revised)" by @Stefan
"Such sweet sorrow Stephan I personally enjoy the ending the point of view is a curious one but very well understood and simple, simplicity is always better in my book. Now due to my pea-sized brain I could not make a co…"
09 Tue

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"The girl is blind and deaf."
Open thread 8 lines
09 Tue

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"Go Away Cupid!" by @greeneyes
"This is great what a fly in your ear that cupid!"
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"Contrast Dye"
Open thread 30 lines
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"Not Fit to Shine Shoes"
Open thread 23 lines
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"Ball of Twine"
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"Actaeon"
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August 2009
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August 2009 — 20 poems
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34 critiques to date.
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on "Perfect pet ?" by @shazbat
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"The World Outside My Shoes" by @Kailashana2

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on Fate Vs. Will from @whitescatter

on Fate Vs. Will from @Nordic cloud

"The Maiden & Her Lover:" by @Dalton

"Isolated Me" by @whitescatter

"A Taste for Life (revised)" by @Stefan

"Cursed in Ink" by @Seren

"Throating "f"s" by @bjp

"Dream Catcher (revised)" by @Stefan

"Go Away Cupid!" by @greeneyes

August 2009 — 20 poems

on "Perfect pet ?" by @shazbat

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