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Masochistic?

Masochistic? The tunnel was slick with light. It was the deepest red she had ever seen.... Seven colors had been crushed together to make it. The girl was washed down On a tide of someone else's pain. Sharply, she saw that she was covered in blood, And started to scream. . Hush, The tunnel said, The blood isn't yours, It isn't yours It isn't yours. . . [During the day, You will see a woman walking through the tunnel, Tearing at the walls With hands worn to pearl Ask her what she is doing. "I mine this tunnel for pain; She will say.]
— Diatom Shells, Oct 30, 2009

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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Shells

What an eerie write. Enjoyable but eerie, lol. I pictured this and I felt so sorry for her and I think you have written a very clever piece and on Halloween to boot. Well done. Love Lyz. XX
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Dalton

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Diatom

Again your use of language is beyond question. But the subject is somewhat criptic to me. This is not a criticism, I would be pleased to know of your views, that I might have a greater understanding of this particular poem. It's always nice to see you have released a new poem over the net, this is not the exeption. Repects Dalton.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

"With hands worn to pearl":-

"With hands worn to pearl":- Oh fascinating Shells a tale well told with sharp presence and colourful reality. Yours with love Ann of Norway