Diatom Shells

Aug 26, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Tsunami

Tsunami Once, I read about a woman Who could make a man come Just by walking over his back With her bare feet And I thought, What would happen If this woman learned to walk On Water?

— Diatom Shells, Aug 26, 2009

Critiques

themoonman

16 years 11 months ago

Diatom Shells...

Where is she?? lol... tsunami's storm surges hurricanes ocean quakes sorry, got carried away in thoughts... lol loved this! Richard

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

I wish I knew! I would recommend her to all my straight and male friends! I am so happy you liked this if I could I would probably write stuff like this always but I don't want to be biased lol. anyways I thank you for stopping in and taking the time to read this. -diatom shells

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Borrowing a word

Borrowing a word "speechlessly" in awe of your take on life in the way of poetry. DS ~A

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

is...

my take on life really that different just kidding I am little odd aren't I? thanks again anna I will try soon to get back to reading my friends poetry I miss it! -diatom shells

orgami

16 years 11 months ago

Always sitting back ready to be ovetaken with whatever

Go ahead sue me! I love your poetry I had a little irish waitress with flashing blue eyes and cute face cute body with perfect size six feet that would shed her shoes and walk on my back in a bar no less (bartendress then) Bare feet!! she had quite a few brothers and said they always got her to do this But she had the touch My vertebrate would Clonk into place yes clonk damn back it was heaven when that occured Forty dollars then for a man to jump on me and do the same uhhmm he was good but I preferred the brunette (man was chiropractor and it was like a wrestling move whatever he did) Walking on water interesting concept and title to thread back into the merge lane with ending Very good Diatom (listening to Marilynn Mansons Heart Shaped Glasses and thinking about size six feet) what a combo of imageries now and here comes the wave!!

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

ha..

the souls of our feet are very soothing and healing I have one of those damn backs too! I have scoliosis and I live with the pain most of the time but I will treat myself to a pain pill here and there got be careful with those as addictions start to creep back. but there I go rambling again. I thank you for your interest in my word. -diatom shells

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Cheeky woman LOL

This is a side of you I haven't seen yet, and its wonderful... there is a touch of the profound and a touch of humour mixed perfectly ... I could say something right now but it wouldnt be appropriate he he great write I am smiling ;) lol love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

you

must have experienced something similar eh? don't worry u don't have to kiss and tell. I love that word 'cheeky' if I could make love to words I woulds do it twice a day lol. anywho thank you jayne right back atcha! -diatom shells muah!

faerybeki

16 years 11 months ago

Diatom, there is something

Diatom, there is something perfect about your poetry, yes, just perfect! Another brilliant write dear girl! I remain...awed :) much love Beki xxx

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

hey you...

ah shucks! thank you so much that's is way to high of a praise for likes of muah. greatly appreciated. -diatom shells

bjp

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Diatom Shells,

Then there was the woman who could do so simply with words - a tale of Arabian nights. But then there is poetry. Brian

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

ah yes..

hello brian, I definately love your take on my work and that concept of arabian nights, beautimas. -diatom shells

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