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Feb 07, 2010
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When a girl dies young and white
And with her body still hemmed,
She is not ready.
She has never taken off her body before.
She cannot unclasp her hands,
She cannot unlace her fingers
Her skin snags on the jut of her breath.....
And will not fall.
Finally, the hatchet blue takes her
And skims her like cream.
~
When a girl dies old and hand-embroidered,
She understands.
She lets her body slip off herself
Like a long silk dress
And it pools around her feet,
She steps out of it and walks forward.
The hatchet blue does not touch her.
~
Your loneliness is always with you,
I know......
It is bone
Somewhere between your mouth and your kiss.
And with her body still hemmed,
She is not ready.
She has never taken off her body before.
She cannot unclasp her hands,
She cannot unlace her fingers
Her skin snags on the jut of her breath.....
And will not fall.
Finally, the hatchet blue takes her
And skims her like cream.
~
When a girl dies old and hand-embroidered,
She understands.
She lets her body slip off herself
Like a long silk dress
And it pools around her feet,
She steps out of it and walks forward.
The hatchet blue does not touch her.
~
Your loneliness is always with you,
I know......
It is bone
Somewhere between your mouth and your kiss.
— Diatom Shells, Feb 07, 2010
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Kailashana
16 years 4 months ago
And I have missed you. You
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
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Orphani
16 years 4 months ago
One has to die and separate
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
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Heading South
16 years 4 months ago
Dear Diatom Shells
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
And I am glad you were not
Stefan
16 years 4 months ago
Hi
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
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Electric Blue
16 years 4 months ago
Breakfast
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
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Lunegirl
16 years 4 months ago
Great use of mataphor and
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
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Seren
16 years 4 months ago
Dear Shells
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
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Polya
16 years 4 months ago
Hmmm...
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
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bjp
16 years 4 months ago
Dear Diatom Shells,
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
Brian!!!
orgami
16 years 4 months ago
cant say anything except this is absolutely wonderful poem
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
Hey you
whitetea
16 years 4 months ago
Nice observations, very
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
So true
greeneyes
16 years 4 months ago
Perfection! That’s all I
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
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anonymous1
16 years 4 months ago
I love this poem
Diatom Shells
16 years 4 months ago
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Kailashana
16 years 3 months ago
;-)
Nicole Michaels
16 years 3 months ago
Crit
Diatom Shells
16 years 3 months ago
Hello