Genesis

Genesis I created the world, And there were no witnesses. ~ Some whisper that one girl Did see it, But the ones Who didn't want her to speak of it Hunted her down. ~ They cut out her voice, And used it to string violins.

— Diatom Shells, Aug 22, 2009

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Your poetry brings tears to

Your poetry brings tears to my eyes. This poem is exquisitely haunting. My dear girl, you are blessed with this gift! ~A Did you ever see THE RED VIOLIN? If not, rent it... here's a taste http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DhqgV4flGdE this is the theme song http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VAuQb_bKI0Q&feature=related "If you have come to help me, you are wasting your time. But if you have come because your liberation is wound up in mine, then let us work together." Aboriginal Activist Group, Queensland, 1970's

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

ooooo

is that a movie I love movies. I can't watch utube on phone but I will definitely look at it when I get to my bros house. and I am glad you said haunting because that is what I was aiming for yay for diatom! -diatom shells

leonard daranjo

16 years 11 months ago

Succinct and beautiful

I love They cut out her voice, And used it to string violins Leonard

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

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yes thank you leonard for your words. -diatom shells

Joseph J. Breu…

16 years 11 months ago

RE: Genesis

I have enjoyed what you've written, but it seems incomplete and only a beginning. Was that your intent? (since Genesis means "beginning") --Joe

Diatom Shells

16 years 11 months ago

hello..

so I thought the saying was the first will be last and the last will be first. I am the alpha and the omega. it was just a poem with these scriptures in mind but my translations are always a little twisted and strange. thank you for your comments and for reading. -diatom shells

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