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Diatom Shells
Dec 16, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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When
the
girl 
and
boy
opened their dark eyes
upward for the first time,
all the light in the sky
tightened into fists......

— Diatom Shells, Dec 16, 2009

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L

Lonnie

16 years 5 months ago

Terse, but forceful!

A well-penned short poem that is to-the-point and brimming with poetic energy!
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 5 months ago

Let it reign?

The fury tailed comets rained down in anger... this is a very vibrant write, in which the light seems to hurt and blind, perhaps saturating the people below with heavenly fist, slamming a virtuous glove and a righteous gauntlet down! Quite visionary really! Hope you are okay Diatom! Dale :)
DS

Diatom Shells

16 years 4 months ago

Hi....

I am very okay just super busy now because I am going to school again, getting an engineering degree hopefully if I feel like it. Thanks for your comments I always love hearing from you....... P.S. Love your pic
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 4 months ago

Thanks for returning Diatom,

Thanks for returning Diatom, I very much miss you and your poems, here, there... Wonderful to-the-point poem. Little fists of light. Love, Anna