Naming Eve

Simply superb. There is a wonderfulness to waterfalling words. This is the best poem I have read for a while in my favourite genre. Again, superb. I liked it so much, I will refuse this time to go looking for little tickles to comment about. Brian

I have to agree with Brian here... glad you decided to share this with us... thank you! Richard

This reminded me of the movie Armegeddon where ben affleck is playing with animal crackers on Liv Tylors stomach was hard to get that vision out of my head ... lol but a bloody good write as Brian said ... well done .. regards Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Dear Beautiful Girl, Your poetry is exquisite... Have you read ted Hughes Poem: "Bride and Groom Lay Hidden For Three Days"... Your poem reminds me of it... my friend calligraphed it and gave it to us on our wedding day...so many years ago... we're legally separated, but I still treasure the poem. You have a talent that is absolutely fierce. ~A "If you have come to help me, you are wasting your time. But if you have come because your liberation is wound up in mine, then let us work together." Aboriginal Activist Group, Queensland, 1970's

A powerful opening. A (my favorite) clever: Their bones were long white consonants. Muscles flickered like vowels beneath audible skin. Great word juxtapositions, metaphors, vocabularies adroitly applied. A strong write. Deserving of plaudits aligned above. And (by gosh) worthy of another five. Thanx (so) much, Chuck PS: Was the "lightening" intended? Or did you want "lightning"?

This piece made me shiver all over, highly deserving of spotlight! (And the alignment works this time ;) Yours, ~Nina

Wonderful and so easy on the eyes. I read it aloud and it flowed like melted butter over the tongue. Favorite lines: Then he lifted his hands and touched her- {she left a slick of spectrum on his fingertips} his eyes curled and closed like smoke and her name rose at the back of his throat and tore a lightening seam in the pale gold air. the imagery... oh the imagery! Always, Cat

An exqusite poem well deserving of the spotlight~ ____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Truly love it!!!---Paul(Greenthumb)

five for welcome but I cringe at the many "thens" but I have just started to read you marvelous word useage I do find that clever

beautiful beautiful beautiful

thats pretty damned good ive known some pompous intellects who can trick me around a corner but their loftiness belongs in the lofty crowd I prefer the common area I truly love this peice the use of the many "thens" to me detracts thats all im just starting to get honest with what i like here and how I find it I may not be well liked for it but its okay with me I think you have the openess for suggestion as Im starting to find and I think you have the talent for this poetry beyond what you already have talent for You have short lines so I wont say anything about line breaks and the long extended lines that sometimes are shown it for me just reads easier and I dont want to pick it apart beyond what this is already You are probably one of the first that I have heavily relaxed and commented on but only because I find you have fantastic potential and must say that your use of words is beyond mine already but enough I have work to do here in the house and must leave I shall however be watching your poems and reading with keen interest a Fan

Carve on and drape our minds in the mysteries of the universe of man, the whole, the totality of existence the searching for the essence of the name of Eve who in her innocence has led us into more theatrical experiments and dreams than any other mythological woman. We 'dryss' with you in this poem. Snow 'dryss' es, falling so gently onto something like the falling of icing sugar. With the undercurrent of fire in your poem. Well written I also give 5, so take five. Not sure you need ALL the then's, like Orgami. Love Ann of Norway

one of my self depracating practises maybe im being hard its just that i find it difficult in other areas and apply it all distorted of course I find inspiration here and from another site U tube and commercials on television the newspaper business section only and snippets of conversations Mostly at Twiggs my woman and her daughter also great fast minds that hunt like destroyers in the choppy wake the bow slicing cold intellect their radar sweep calling in the dark I'll go read some other of your works im listening to U tube mood music drinking one litre of cola gliding on pain meds and other prescribed anti everything before dreamland gates joy divisions Day of the Lords moodily dreary "where will it end.....where will it end!??"

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finishing up the hour at the mall going over Neo poems and drawn as I am to familar old like favourite chapters read from warm welcome books i favour this poem it is creative and well crafted subtle and startling wanted to say more but there is nothing then what is already exposed in the read again Thank you~

I always know I'm in for a treat when I see a poem with your name at the heading. Especially when it is an expansion of a biblical theme. You have an ornate structure to your verse that is both seductive and in its way informative. I love poems about Adam and Eve, the fall of man, and his inevitable redemption. As destined as the very act of original sin was written by the hand of God. We can't remain children, with childish/innocent minds, forever. If you believe the serpent was nothing more than the emergence of human instinct, a sign of growth written in the genetic make up of all living beings. I love the tale of the innocent nature of our oldest ancestors. The lion laying down with the lamb. Thankyou for "Naming Eve" on behalf of all who have the pleasure of reading it. Respects Dalton.