seabhac

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Malfunction in the concept of Love

Posted Dec 17, 2010 · 17 lines · 5 critiques

Twenty eight days to return you
Just because you don’t please me
If you don’t match what I have already
I can send you back.

Perhaps, in the light of my home
Your colour is not quite right.
If you function well
I may just hold onto you,
Working you day and night

Should your light go out
Or you are not cool anymore,
I am guaranteed a replacement
As good as, if not better than the last.

A malfunction sends a man to repair you
He attempts to kick or shake you to your senses.
Unperturbed, they will wheel you away
Placing a new one just where you stood.

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December 2010
17 Fri

Received a critique
on Malfunction in the concept of Love from @scribbler
"A very nice statement of the lack of guarantee in love. Good to see you back.................scribbler"
17 Fri

Received a critique
on Malfunction in the concept of Love from @Roscoe Lane
"True love is irriplaceable, you can't buy and sell it. It's either there or it's not, even in the most fickle person. Your poem describes perfectly the way we treat objects, as though you read it straight from the rappe…"
17 Fri

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Malfunction in the concept of Love
"Twenty eight days to return you"
Open thread 17 lines
16 Thu

Critiqued
"Master's degree in frozen hearts (edit) " by @mona
"An interesting poem Mona. I liked the title it drew me in and though I just get the chance to read the odd poem at present here on Neo I felt I should take the time to comment on this. I would like to take the poem as i…"
November 2010
26 Fri

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@loved
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Critiqued
""The blood of Cùchulainn” Tales of the Morrigan " by @shirley harrison
"There is much to the wild tales of cuchullainn and much truth in the stories. Irelands favoured hero and yet you go for his human weakness here , a great perspective on a giant...but just don't tell the little people…"
July 2010
18 Sun

Received a critique
on July in Skye from @Seren
"I loved this one but there was something missing ... I cant put my finger on it I have written a post it note and I will come back lol bad short term memory ... the post its help lol (hugs) good to see you around love a…"
18 Sun

Received a critique
on July in Skye from @Lil Z
"I loved the language and feel to this one, great work!"
17 Sat

Posted a poem
July in Skye
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14 Wed

Received a critique
on The sea from @ziggy
"hi their stranger i just had a thought and came to read your words which has your fine pen writting wonders ,,,,,,zigs"
12 Mon

Critiqued
"Lost Lore" by @xena465
"beautiful search inward To where the answers lie A place some fear to tread Though through these words I see you try. Please keep the search going And find the you within that rests and softly slumbers ( While I wish th…"
10 Sat

Critiqued
"the queen of maybe and the prince of perhaps" by @nomad collapse
"Don't normally give stars on a first poem but I think this is a very cleverly written piece. Great rhythm and flow and lots of little nuances...I love it and I am happy to nominate it too. Well done Seabhac"
08 Thu

Critiqued
"I Love You " by @Seren
"Just dipped in for a quick visit and found this ...strange how it is an old style and yet I see some of the 'new' poet in its style also. There was one line that stuck a bit with me because of its rhyming form Through t…"
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"The More I Look" by @Dennis Go
"Loved it Dennis trimmed and honed in words but not emotion Seabhac"
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"good morning earth rise" by @Kailashana
"Ah ...evokes a wonderful image... Thank you for that Seabhac"
04 Sun

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"Bushmans final homecoming" by @Seren
"Your life and the life of the earth there with you touches me through your words. The two sides of a weapon used for life and death. You have captured that taste beautifully. Best Wishes Seabhac"
04 Sun

Received a critique
on The sea from @Seren
"I have missed your words and I have missed you, exquisite poem sigh sigh sigh welcome back love and big hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understo…"
03 Sat

Received a critique
on Golden Dreams from @magics02
"Got to hand you this one gal with a well deserved Nom also. This is a write beyond a write and I say bravo to you on your write. I share this one with you and miss reading your work. Must be busy painting and I like the…"
03 Sat

Received a critique
on Golden Dreams from @Nordic cloud
"Ann of Norway "As I riddle my pan Is the gleaming glittering residue Real or just fools gold." Love this bit it is so felt like a shake, and it has the absurd within its expression too, no if all is paradise we wouldn't…"
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October 2009 — 14 poems
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First critique offered
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on Malfunction in the concept of Love from @scribbler

on Malfunction in the concept of Love from @Roscoe Lane

"Master's degree in frozen hearts (edit) " by @mona

""The blood of Cùchulainn” Tales of the Morrigan " by @shirley harrison

on July in Skye from @Seren

on July in Skye from @Lil Z

on The sea from @ziggy

"Lost Lore" by @xena465

"the queen of maybe and the prince of perhaps" by @nomad collapse

"I Love You " by @Seren

One year of membership

"The More I Look" by @Dennis Go

"good morning earth rise" by @Kailashana

"Bushmans final homecoming" by @Seren

on The sea from @Seren

on Golden Dreams from @magics02

on Golden Dreams from @Nordic cloud

1,000 critiques given

October 2009 — 14 poems

on "Fucking Freedom" by @bjp

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