seabhac

May 10, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Commitment

Safe in armsThat embraced two pastsTwo roads in lifeTheir different routesCollided with comet speed With lighting strikeLove poured outMerged and bondedWith all that they touched Verdant green in the winter’s snowTheir love grewIt was beautiful to watch the unfoldingAs walls tumbled and gates openedOn fallow feelings deep in both Today a joyful marriageOf united hopeFrom green sliversTo ripening golden barleyThat dances in the fieldOf their new lifeTo the tune of Meatloaf.

— seabhac, May 10, 2010

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Critiques

yenti

16 years 1 month ago

Seabhac

A lovely tribute to anothers findings in love or for that matter life its self, A well written piece, await the ones you write for you, Yours Ian.T

seabhac

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Ian

Thanks for dropping in. Not too sure if it is right yet but I have given them a copy to read and should get feedback there too. She sang with a meatloaf tribute band and he is a cattle farmer with a love of growing barley...a complex love match if there was ever one. Best Wishes Seabhac

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

I wonder if there is barley

I wonder if there is barley in the meat loaf. ;-) Lovely poem... I'll be interested in how you'll read it when it's *finished*, replete with feedback. Perhaps you'll post it as *spoken word*? ~A "If you think you're free, there's no escape possible." ~ Ram Dass

seabhac

16 years ago

Early stages yet

They have a few points they would like tweeked and they feel a little more length would help and for me I have been feeling that I would lke to do some spoken work soon and this seems the best focus to begin such a quest with. Thanks A Seabhac

raskin

16 years 1 month ago

Lovely tribute, they

Lovely tribute, they are fortunate to have you as a friend. raskin

seabhac

16 years ago

Ah Raskin

I think I give them cause to laugh on a daily basis...this wedding will be a dynamic occassion...Scottish castle on the coastline of Dumfrieshire...atmosphere already set...my task half done!!! Best Wishes Seabhac

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest Liz

Sigh I am getting married later in the year we have put our wedding off until october lol I decided I wanted a bit more hair before I get married ;) your friends are blessed and so is their marriage with your beautiful blessing ... and thats what this is love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

seabhac

16 years ago

Great news indeed

I am sure when the timing is right you will be very happy with the date and I imagine you will be so beautiful as that beauty has come out to all of us in your writings of this last year... Hugs Seabhac

seabhac

16 years ago

Now Eph

I would love to see what you would write on such occassion,deep meaningfull and of course hilarious... Seabhac

ziggy

16 years ago

hi

hi there a fine tribute indeed and i was thinking while reading were you at a wedding nicely put across ,,,,,zigs

seabhac

16 years ago

Will try and take Anna up on the challenge

See if I can improve it and use the brogue to guild the words on the day...ha ha Seabhac

xena465

16 years ago

Grab life while you can

Wise and lovely words Liz...Meat Loaf? Which song? I love all his songs...especially the one that refers to..."Let me sleep on it"...I'd be asking, before marriage..."Do you love me”...reply “I'll give you an answer in the morning...Mmm!" Rosina xena465

seabhac

16 years ago

Ha ha Rosina

You know your meatloaf....for all the reasons you have so beautifully put they have asked for the last line to be different...spoil sports.... Still laughing Seabhac

shirley harrison

16 years ago

wonderful poem

I hope you are brave and read it at the wedding you will be forever loved! shirley harrison