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seabhac
seabhac
Apr 30, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The word Body

  The outer body of the Kirk roseTo the rising of the bookHigher voices sang as oneTo the highest listener The outer body knelt as oneTo the condemnation of the WordEyes down as oneFor the troubles of their souls The outer body of the Kirk leftAs oneStreaming out into the lightSpurring off in sleeked clans The inner body of the Kirk was emptyDesolate and alone another week to passDevising ways to stay saneUntil Sunday service comes round again
— seabhac, Apr 30, 2010

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lyz

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Liz

You have exercised the word body in an ingenious way, Kirks Church and its parishioners. Cleverly created, I must say. Well done and I enjoyed the read. Love Lyz. XX
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Lyz

Thanks for the feedback, it's always so helpful Seabhac
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Julie

Lovely to have you drop in and say hello Seabhac
Ross Hamilton Hill

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years 1 month ago

hi seabhac

I liked this , the repetition creates the mood of a church service. 'sleeked clans' is a good image, I could see that. I just looked up seabhac and how to pronounce it, there are sea hawks where I fish near byron bay, magnificent , they'd swoop near me trying to get my bait. kind regards ross
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 1 month ago

Your sea hawks sound amazing

I can visualise this fisherman resplendid with his rod and essential notebook( for moments of poetic inspiration) alone on the rocks being divebombed by an incredible bird of prey. Thank you for the beautiful image of you Best Wishes Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Liz

there is the a seed of prayer here this is a lovely write i enjoyed the read sorry to be late (hugs) love JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 1 month ago

Hi Jayne

Well for all my wildness I guess there may well still be a seed of prayer within me. Best Wishes Seabhac
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

excercise

makes men's rise hope u know it women have no surprise for after the rise ther's always a prize first class one indeed no???
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 1 month ago

ha ha love it

defintaly first class Not getting a lot of time to read on the site at the moment but will catch up soon with all your new work. Seabhac
loved

loved

16 years 1 month ago

thanks

i am a gold and like wine... old wine in newer bottles not the other way around thanks for the hahaha i love people when they laff and smile it helps me compose all my while