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Dennis Go
Dennis Go
Jul 02, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

The More I Look

The more I look,
The more she touches me
Profusely.

Her eyes peel my very
Skin, my essence
Of spontaneity's mirth.

Her hair flows down
To my heart's contagion
Motionless of no cure
But to give in,

Though I burn.
— Dennis Go, Jul 02, 2010

About the Author

Region, Country: Manila, PHL

Favorite Poets: R.S. Thomas, William Blake, Emily Dickinson, Dylan Thomas

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Mari Shine

16 years ago

The More I Look

'But to give in, Though I burn' and what a lovely way to go Dennis! These lines are the icing on the poetic cake for me! I adore this concise, sensual, tender, romantic write, in which the writer drew me in from the very title and held me, a very willing captive there reading the poem and absorbing it to the very last word. I love the flow to this stellar inking Dennis, the words trip of my tongue effortlessly, as I read. I also love the visual detail in this finely expressed poem, giving the reader a picture of the effect someone special has on someone special.......... Beautiful work Dennis and another resplendent poetic gem to add to your wonderful collection. Thank You for sharing with me........
Dennis Go

Dennis Go

16 years ago

Thanks Marie

Thanks again for your kind comments. I always appreciate your meticulous evaluation on my pieces, though you always seem to flatter me. :) Thanks
xena465

xena465

16 years ago

HOT stuff Dennis

I wish that was me you were writing about, awe, but it's not, so I'll just dream that someone might one day...fabulous. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Dennis Go

Dennis Go

16 years ago

Thanks Xena

I'm definitely sure a certain special someone will someday do. Thanks for your kind comment. :)
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Dennis

I see your new so, welcome to Neopoet ... this is really sublime poetry I look forward to reading more from you kind regards JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Seren

Seren

16 years ago

Ditto … easier for me to

Ditto ... easier for me to keep up with your poetry lol Regard JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dennis

Delicious! I soaked it all in. Favorite lines: Her hair flows down To my heart’s contagion Motionless of no cure But to give in, Though I burn. Always, Cat
Dennis Go

Dennis Go

16 years ago

Thanks Seabhac

Thanks for the comment. I'll add you up in my buddylist if you don't mind :)
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years ago

Would you consider the last

Would you consider the last line to be: I burn in her image? Loved the poem any way, shape or form. ~A The whole modern world has divided itself into Conservatives and Progressives. The business of Progressives is to go on making mistakes. The business of the Conservatives is to prevent the mistakes from being corrected. G.K. Chesteron
Dennis Go

Dennis Go

16 years ago

Thanks kailashana

Thanks for the comment. I prefer it to be as it is. Thanks for your suggestion though :)
SH

shirley harrison

16 years ago

"WOW"

you sure do know how to excite a women! this is stunning! shirley harrison
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raj

16 years ago

Hello Dennis

Indeed you are a welcome addition to this fraternity... the more i read this one the more i perceive its intensity...and absorb the ripples ...rarely i have seen the word Contagion used so beautifully... warmly...raj (sublime_ocean)
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paparazii

16 years ago

Very emotional and

Very emotional and beautifully displayed! Thanks, did enjoyed it.
Dennis Go

Dennis Go

16 years ago

Thanks

Thanks for your kind comment :) I'll add you up on my buddy list if you don't mind.

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