evie.haywood

Member since February 25, 2010

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My eyes are dry

Posted Jun 25, 2010 · 12 lines · 1 critiques

They're dry.
I promise you, my eyes are dry.
There's a drought building up inside.
Eventually, it'll end;
When all my sorrows transform
There'll be a flood
and I'll cry for years.
Oceans will spill from my skin.
Rivers will burst deep within.
I'll be stranded, heartbroken.
I'd rather they stayed bone dry
Because then I'll know you still love me.

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June 2010
28 Mon

Received a critique
on Trophy Girl from @Geezer
"Maybe you could use different lines, to say the same thing? Something like: You want a slender willow, when you put your arms about me. A feather-weight to lift above your head. Just suggestions. If you are too obscure…"
27 Sun

Received a critique
on My eyes are dry from @Beauregard
"so that it builds up until you can't hold it in anymore and you've got yourself a flood of emotion. It happens to me a lot. I want to be strong and suppress the anger and frustration and sadness, but I can't ever seem t…"
25 Fri

Received a critique
on Don't change for Me from @xena465
"I only helped a little to show that your poem was great from the start. Now it's brilliant. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell"
25 Fri

Posted a poem
My eyes are dry
"They're dry."
Open thread 12 lines
25 Fri

Received a critique
on Don't change for Me from @xena465
"I've made only a few changes that I think reads better without changing the meaning of your poem (I hope) Just a suggestion... You don’t have to speak when I know what you’re going to say. You don’t have to speed up or…"
24 Thu

Received a critique
on Trophy Girl from @Geezer
"very much, it gave me the picture I think you wanted to show. I think your rhythm is a little awkward, but it can be improved. That I don't snap when you hold me? I'm not sure what that means. Also the line about not we…"
24 Thu

Critiqued
"The Summer Sun" by @Nimmy x
"Naomiiii, this is literally really beautiful. So summery :) x"
24 Thu

Received a critique
on Trophy Girl from @shirley harrison
"well i have to say inspiring miss Evie Trophy girl friends are for the foolish! wonderful write and welcome to Neo, as i havent seen you here before! shirley harrison"
24 Thu

Posted a poem
Trophy Girl
" There's a ladder in my tights"
Open thread 12 lines
21 Mon

Received a critique
on Don't change for Me from @xena465
"A lovely honest poem. I agree with Roscoe, a wee bit of revision would make this a great poem. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell"
21 Mon

Received a critique
on Don't change for Me from @Roscoe Lane
"tell us what our insecurities should or should not be. Good poem but with a little work it could be great, the theme is great.Regards Roscoe.."
21 Mon

Posted a poem
Don't change for Me
"You don’t have to speak"
Open thread 17 lines
April 2010
21 Wed

Critiqued
"Poplars" by @mantiscepter
"I love the simplistic yet descriptive side of this poem. The last part "I thought: how beautiful" is my favourite line. No fussy language - straight out beauty. :) Well written. Evie"
16 Fri

Posted a poem
13 things I hate about you
"I hate that you keep me awake at night"
Open thread 14 lines
14 Wed

Posted a poem
Sand-grain in the Snow
"You're the shadow that clings on to me,"
Open thread 12 lines
08 Thu

Posted a poem
It's all for you silly
"The breath I just took"
Open thread 15 lines
06 Tue

Posted a poem
Her Him
"A devil in disguise,"
Open thread 16 lines
04 Sun

Posted a poem
Raindrop
"It is honestly all that is keeping me awake."
Open thread 11 lines
03 Sat

Posted a poem
Hypocracy Thy Name
"Where is the difference"
Open thread 14 lines
March 2010
28 Sun

Posted a poem
Summer Romance
"Laughing on the beach,"
Open thread 16 lines
26 Fri

Posted a poem
He's My Dad
"You took him away"
Open thread 15 lines
25 Thu

Posted a poem
All I can think about.
"All I can think about"
Open thread 23 lines
15 Mon

Highest posting month
March 2010 — 20 poems
09 Tue

Critiqued
"I saw you" by @jim
"Aww, so beautiful. Appealing to a range of audiences too. Well done. : ) Evie"
07 Sun

Critiqued
"smoking glass" by @Seren
"Wow, completely beautiful. :) Evie"
05 Fri

Critiqued
"she" by @jim
"I love it. So much mysetery and depth. Evie"
02 Tue

Critiqued
"Your Smile" by @yenti
"This beautiful, it must be said. Whilst I don't completely understand all of the language - I'm working on it - just the flow I find very capturing. Evie"
02 Tue

Critiqued
"Your Smile" by @yenti
"This beautiful, it must be said. Whilst I don't cocmpletely understand all of the language - I'm working on it - just the flow I find very capturing. Evie"
February 2010
25 Thu

Critiqued
"Unearthed" by @sunscreen
"I really love this poem. It gives me a sense of realism and the structure is so constant which I find helps not to distract from the poem itself. I aso find that it leaves alot of room for interpetation. Evie"
25 Thu

First critique offered
on "Unearthed" by @sunscreen
25 Thu

First publication
Mind War
24 Wed

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on Trophy Girl from @Geezer

on My eyes are dry from @Beauregard

on Don't change for Me from @xena465

on Don't change for Me from @xena465

on Trophy Girl from @Geezer

"The Summer Sun" by @Nimmy x

on Trophy Girl from @shirley harrison

on Don't change for Me from @xena465

on Don't change for Me from @Roscoe Lane

"Poplars" by @mantiscepter

March 2010 — 20 poems

"I saw you" by @jim

"smoking glass" by @Seren

"she" by @jim

"Your Smile" by @yenti

"Your Smile" by @yenti

"Unearthed" by @sunscreen

on "Unearthed" by @sunscreen

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