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Mar 09, 2010
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I saw you
I saw you
from across the bar.
This dark and smokey room.
Your smile
lit up your face
and with it
the whole room.
Like someone turned
the light on.
In this dark
and smokey room.
I watched you dance
and float
and prance.
My eyes were
stuck on you.
You looked just
like an angel.
With your
eyes of blue.
from across the bar.
This dark and smokey room.
Your smile
lit up your face
and with it
the whole room.
Like someone turned
the light on.
In this dark
and smokey room.
I watched you dance
and float
and prance.
My eyes were
stuck on you.
You looked just
like an angel.
With your
eyes of blue.
— jim, Mar 09, 2010
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evie.haywood
16 years 3 months ago
Aww, so beautiful. Appealing
jim
16 years 3 months ago
thanks Evie
magics02
16 years 3 months ago
Great one!!
jim
16 years 3 months ago
thanks im glad u liked it.jim
Harvey
16 years 3 months ago
Nice
jim
16 years 3 months ago
Thank you
Seren
16 years 3 months ago
Dear Jim
jim
16 years 3 months ago
thanks
jetz
16 years 3 months ago
I really like this one too
jim
16 years 3 months ago
hi sue
BrightEyed
16 years 3 months ago
:)
Silent_Rain
16 years 2 months ago
AWW!!!