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Unearthed

The ground rattles and breaks
Buildings fall and crumble
Their weight falls on ground

The earth quakes and tumbles
 Mother Nature’s birthing pains
Destruction of beliefs

They lose all hope
Forgot how to cope
Still dealing dope

Loss of friends and family
Distraught and empty
Crushed and homeless

Sorrow surrounds us
Today and tomorrow
Till we strike and loose arrow

Follow down a road of empty
Till we meet at the end
From this loss we gain plenty

Life is a game we might still win.
 


 




— sunscreen, Feb 25, 2010

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evie.haywood

16 years 3 months ago

I really love this poem. It

I really love this poem. It gives me a sense of realism and the structure is so constant which I find helps not to distract from the poem itself. I aso find that it leaves alot of room for interpetation. Evie
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you :)

I Wrote this when I was thinking about whats happening in Haiti.
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

I agree entirely with

I agree entirely with evie...very well expressed. Rosina xena465
VX

Venus x

16 years 3 months ago

WOW!

Venus WOW!! An outstanding picture you paint of the pain and suffering of the human element caused by nature, or as I would say, Mother Earth. Lovely, sad pen that flows well and carries the reader along quite nicely, because it comes from the inner Spirit. Bravo! Peace, love and light to you and yours, Venus xxx
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you

I've done a couple revisions, and ended up having to redo it once or twice, because it was all wrong, but i give all credit to Nina, she pointed me in the right direction.
VX

Venus x

16 years 3 months ago

Nina's pointing

Venus Nina's pointing was certainly in the right direction, the finished product is outstanding. **Smiles** Venus xxx