U K Atiyodi

Member since October 28, 2010

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Fertility

Posted Dec 4, 2010 · 16 lines · 2 critiques

Hectic search in the mind's forest,
Dicker hearts, yea, heart for heart.
Two or three immutable minds appeared,
Smiles in cheek but gloom in heart,
The reluctant hearts repel, Oh, repel!
A taboo to the dense forest, yet he moved
He saw wonderful beasts, terrible and good,
Now he lost his way, he wanders in the dense wood,
He began to write poems flowing from the heart,
Then he was hungry to drink the intoxicants,
The juice of some drug-plants inspired him,
Gulped a mouthful of fantastic dreams,
Be no blob,I want thee in my heart, the intoxicant
Made him write and write to get the Nobel.
He some how escaped from dense thoughts
He became great with his wonderful ideas.

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Received a critique
on Fertility from @weirdelf
"of Coleridge's immortal "Kubla Khan". I love the imagery and stream of consciousness but two lines bother me a lot- Be no blob,I want thee in my heart, the intoxicant [blob? oh come on! the word lowers the tone of the p…"
December 2010
04 Sat

Posted a poem
Fertility
"Hectic search in the mind's forest,"
Open thread 16 lines
October 2010
28 Thu

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
July 2010
18 Sun

Posted a poem
Aggressive
"Words are aggro today, aflame with lightning,"
Open thread 27 lines
18 Sun

Critiqued
"Across the Dingo Tracks " by @Seren
"Each individual is alone in this world with his own problems. Sharing is only superficial. This world consists of our own thoughts and actions. Face the odds in life with outstanding courage. fear is the root cause of a…"
17 Sat

Critiqued
"Holes in my Shoes" by @Seren
"Only poets have hearts to lose If they are lost, how can life sustain? Serene is calm, with a volcano inside so strong in conviction, fighting injustice, Go on we are with you so that the heart is not lost."
16 Fri

Received a critique
on Stains of blood from @Candlewitch
"Great language use, I had to use the dictionary and learn something new today :) favorite lines: These people were elected to rule us. Law breakers rule us, Teach us to obey law! That is democracy…. Always, Cat"
16 Fri

Received a critique
on Fire flames from @Candlewitch
"I think the last few lines really sum it up. They also happen to be my favorites: A pregnant cloud of agony drips, Pours then to cool a turbulent heart, Wishes withered, the soul lies in fire flames, The fire of pessimi…"
16 Fri

Posted a poem
Fire flames
"The spring of music pierces my heart,"
Open thread 21 lines
16 Fri

Critiqued
"Cathedral to Dream" by @Seren
"A plane of surrealism is a blissful experience. Eternal passion from night's weep...."Falling leaves are grazing cheek..." Almost all lines evoke a feeling beyond me to explain. Yet the poem touches somewhere and tickle…"
15 Thu

Received a critique
on Nizam's Harem from @Seren
"It still boggles my mind that women are seen and treated like this ... and it varies country to country but there are men that see women as possessions and not people loved your poem bravo love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by…"
15 Thu

Received a critique
on Nizam's Harem from @Victorclaude
"U. K., As far as the theme is concerned, it is an old one, and well repeated not the least for being heard again. People have been possessions of 'men', who cannot be caring humans, until they relinquish their human pos…"
15 Thu

Posted a poem
Nizam's Harem
"(I read about the harem of the Nizam of Hyderabad and felt embarrassed.  So I write...)"
Open thread 24 lines
15 Thu

Critiqued
"A Phantom of Red Dust " by @Seren
"Chapter one is read, I look for the next Each chapter is a stage in life Turning back there is room for satiety A life well used and spent for all. Each life is a book, read the folios Experience the eventful part of bi…"
13 Tue

Received a critique
on Devaluation from @greeneyes
"There is true power in this one, amazing."
13 Tue

Critiqued
"Celebrated Dying Day" by @docmaverick
"There is philosophy in it. Ego is there I think I am right, so is every one.Spelling may be corrected.(eg dying, not dieing)Continue with the same idea"
13 Tue

Critiqued
"Shadowy Whispers" by @greeneyes
"Shadowy whispers...voiceless murmur...fondling breeze always have shadowy whispers. It is soothing. There is a poet in you. Faith in the world makes you a real human. So very good"
12 Mon

Received a critique
on Time-elephant from @Mari Shine
"Mistakes?"
12 Mon

Received a critique
on Devaluation from @raskin
"Great opinion piece, cautionary. Become what you see, be careful. Nicely told. raskin"
12 Mon

Posted a poem
Devaluation
"Serials, serials, serials"
Open thread 19 lines
12 Mon

Critiqued
"Puppet Life Blind 3: Heart Of Greed" by @whitescatter
"whites catter wrote a realistic poem in tune with the predicament we face now. Disparity occurs everywhere, and only the fittest survive. Nature showers talents on some, and some others are destined to suffer. It seems…"
10 Sat

Posted a poem
Time-elephant
"Nature always make inscrutable decrees,"
Open thread 25 lines
10 Sat

Critiqued
"First Love." by @Mari Shine
"'Magic wove two hearts together' Lullaby. A beautiful kid. I like the poem due to its simplicity and poesy"
07 Wed

Posted a poem
Stains of blood
"Veridically they proclaimed their commitment,"
Open thread 17 lines
02 Fri

Posted a poem
Mind
"Mind, a dense forest"
Open thread 17 lines
June 2010
28 Mon

Posted a poem
Roaming
"Black shoddy clouds, you float and move like a vagabond"
Open thread 20 lines
26 Sat

Posted a poem
Breather
"(That day I saw the addict cut to dust.  He was beyond recovery.  Sadly  I wrote thispoem)"
Open thread 29 lines
17 Thu

Posted a poem
Separation
"The blizzard has set, but I'm safe,"
Open thread 31 lines
13 Sun

Posted a poem
Beauty of rhythm
"The silent 'raga' is beauty, so sing, sing, sing..."
Open thread 20 lines
May 2010
31 Mon

Most-discussed work
Ever green love

11 critiques to date.
February 2010
15 Mon

Highest posting month
February 2010 — 19 poems
January 2010
06 Wed

First critique offered
on "coffee cup" by @Orphani
December 2009
26 Sat

First publication
Again a crow

15 years of membership

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5 years of membership

One year of membership

on Fertility from @weirdelf

Membership begins

"Across the Dingo Tracks " by @Seren

"Holes in my Shoes" by @Seren

on Stains of blood from @Candlewitch

on Fire flames from @Candlewitch

"Cathedral to Dream" by @Seren

on Nizam's Harem from @Seren

on Nizam's Harem from @Victorclaude

"A Phantom of Red Dust " by @Seren

on Devaluation from @greeneyes

"Celebrated Dying Day" by @docmaverick

"Shadowy Whispers" by @greeneyes

on Time-elephant from @Mari Shine

on Devaluation from @raskin

"Puppet Life Blind 3: Heart Of Greed" by @whitescatter

"First Love." by @Mari Shine

February 2010 — 19 poems

on "coffee cup" by @Orphani

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