greeneyes

Jul 13, 2010 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Shadowy Whispers

I hear the whispers, in the blowing breeze,
The laughter that taunts me, it's in the trees.
Beckoning me to join the dance,
Making sure I know It's my last chance.

They want to take me,make me their own,
Telling me their love is like none I've known,
I can almost feel them caress my cheek,
I fear them fiercely, I cannot speak.

"Come to us," I hear them plead,
"We have it all, everything that you need."
I do not wish to follow the light,
I will stay where I am, I choose to fight.

"Go away" I tell them, I don't want you here,
"If I have faith in this world, I have nothing to fear,
I want to live, and walk in the sun,
I will join you, when I've decided I'm done.

— greeneyes, Jul 13, 2010

About the Author

Country/Region: Colorado Springs Colorado

Favorite Poets: I love Dr. Suess! He is my favorite, I would love to write for children.

Critiques

Lil Z

16 years ago

I loved this!

I will also get to reading your other brilliant works, as I was away from the internet for a little while, but I've read it over a few times to comprehend the beauty in your words, I loved this part especially; '“Go away” I tell them, I don’t want you here, “If I have faith in this world, I have nothing to fear"' A very deep write that I was glad to read! Sincerely, Lil Z

Roscoe Lane

16 years ago

I wonder,

could nature be telling us something in the breeze, such as this is a beautiful poem. love roscoe..

shirley harrison

16 years ago

Shadowy Whispers!

Dear Green Eyes, wow Your poetry always touches me deeply, How amazing this poem, I hope the whispers are from Angels! but this write could also be many things! really wonnderful much love shirley harrison

xena465

16 years ago

Sweet Elizabeth

Beautifully written and I understand where your going with this lovely write... "I hear the whispers, in the blowing breeze, The laughter that taunts me, it’s in the trees". ...fabulous lines Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

U K Atiyodi

16 years ago

Shadowy whispers…voiceless

Shadowy whispers...voiceless murmur...fondling breeze always have shadowy whispers. It is soothing. There is a poet in you. Faith in the world makes you a real human. So very good

greeneyes

16 years ago

Thank you what visting

Thank you what visting everyone. Xena, your last poem was brilliant!

xena465

16 years ago

Thank you

That's so nice of you Elizabeth. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Elizabeth

I loved it and its all been said before me bravo love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Candlewitch

16 years ago

Dear Elizabeth

A very moving poem. I enjoyed the read about death's invitation and your refusal. My favorite lines: “Go away” I tell them, I don’t want you here, “If I have faith in this world, I have nothing to fear, I want to live, and walk in the sun, I will join you, when I’ve decided I’m done. Love, Cat

hobo

16 years ago

very nice

This is really a very nice write :) *You can never pick anyone up if you are busy putting them down*

greeneyes

16 years ago

Thanks everyone

loved

16 years ago

its abs coincidental

that at the same time i wrote my poem say it in whispers too i know two minds in the whole wild world somewhere think alike simultaneously as we two do two poets anew

loved

16 years ago

its abs coincidental

that at the same time i wrote my poem say it in whispers too i know two minds in the whole wild world somewhere think alike simultaneously as we two do two poets anew

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