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Breather

(That day I saw the addict cut to dust.  He was beyond recovery.  Sadly  I wrote thispoem)

I, a panting train,
With fazzled energy.
     All my nerves to be surcharged.
For my brain is doped, I am helpless.

Systems doted--bring the domino, cover me
Lethargy is inducted, sleep, sleep...
   
     Indiscreet words are thrus,
My mind's kiosk is shut, shut, shut...

I blubber, blubber.
Cull I am. Senses are lost.

My body is a banana republic.
My brain is a gas bag.

Falderal movements, fall out common sense.
Peepers tired, mouth watered I lay here

Jelly-babies give me life.
I want a stifled chest,
I want a silenced heart.

     A silenced heart
Garble my arms untidy,
Syringe holes aplenty, how many, do you know?

See there an idyllic land, far far away
In the back of my mind.
God has befriended Satan
     Here lives petrified people
I am not liberated, I lie here.

This land burns and burns.
     My life a flunk, a flunk..flunk


— U K Atiyodi, Jun 26, 2010

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Professor Purple

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

Harsh, real harsh,

which is very fitting for this subject. I would only change " here lives petrified people" to "here live", and I'm not sure about the title. Otherwise great, starts well, then keeps my interest til the end, very strong ending. Antoine
UA

U K Atiyodi

15 years 11 months ago

Professor Purple

Thank you Sir, for the correction. Pl help in future also. Drug abuse day was ignored by us