doorman

Member since August 5, 2009

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I assume (edit)

Posted Oct 28, 2010 · 13 lines · 7 critiques

A tip with greens and tangerines
attach to some large thing beyond
the frame's geometry, for granted
and on blue

Mathematical? Not like the hour
I look away from what is crumpled,
and see nothing

And I assume

the garden chairs still lie about
Crickets in what I thought was
grass,- (their number troubles
me), but one

Beneath the cotton parasol

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October 2010
29 Fri

Received a critique
on I assume (edit) from @Victorclaude
""Not like the hour I look away from what is crumpled, and see nothing" Something about these that just allows one's mind to wander past limits of where it has been before, or thinks boundaries were limits, when there ar…"
29 Fri

Received a critique
on I assume (edit) from @DawningDaytripper
"Some interesting contradictions that draw my attention Doorman. Good read, Julie D.D."
28 Thu

Posted a poem
I assume (edit)
"A tip with greens and tangerines"
Open thread 13 lines
August 2010
04 Wed

Anniversary
One year of membership
June 2010
15 Tue

Received a critique
on I assume from @Nordic cloud
"Ann of Norway "Long time no see" Livet kan vaere travelt ikke sant? Man er bare ett menneske, og holder pa med sa mange her!!!! Thank you and love from Ann."
02 Wed

Received a critique
on I assume from @Nordic cloud
"Ann of Norway You side step in your personal dance of the mind, and trip us up as your words catch our breath and toy with our minds, in a "Waiting for Godot" type absurdity. You expect us who read, to sense into this w…"
May 2010
05 Wed

Received a critique
on I assume from @ziggy
"hi there espen good to read your fine words again glad i stopped by your page good day my friend ,,,,,,,zigs"
04 Tue

Received a critique
on I assume from @Candlewitch
"My favorite lines (just because they struck my fancy) Mathematical? Not like an hour Always, Cat"
03 Mon

Posted a poem
I assume
"A tip with greens and tangerines  attach to some large thing beyond"
Open thread 16 lines
April 2010
15 Thu

Received a critique
on Colony holiday from @Ross Hamilton Hill
"also liked it, wanted more,"
12 Mon

Received a critique
on Impertinent guests from @panaella
"Does the homage thingy apply to people?...there's a few on neo..I could 'homage'!!!!!!! Ells x"
09 Fri

Critiqued
"Weather falling, feet grounded" by @J.Thomas
"To me, the beauty of this write lies in the sense of age it carries. Sincere emotion underneath a well written poem. Good stuff there, J.T. Regards, Espen."
08 Thu

Posted a poem
Colony holiday
"Hear the murmur of our minds held back by  messy embarrassment, the inner workings "
Open thread 11 lines
07 Wed

Posted a poem
Impertinent guests
"Appreciate"
Open thread 11 lines
04 Sun

Critiqued
"ON THE BORDERLINE" by @Bonitaj
"It's the 'emotional bleeder' that 'pathetically picks', not the scabs. Apologies, I misread. I guess I've nothing to pick at here. A fresh piece of work, so tune carefully. I'll take a look at 'Addiction' when I can. Yo…"
03 Sat

Critiqued
"ad nauseum" by @Seren
"This is a fucking good gathering of words. Espen."
03 Sat

Critiqued
"Pest Hex" by @lyz
"A myriad of pictures in each line. Wonderful stack of forced fantasy well written. If I may nitpick,- bring in opposition to the end. Concluding blue with orange,- you know what I'm talking about. Sincerely yours, Espen."
03 Sat

Critiqued
"ON THE BORDERLINE" by @Bonitaj
"Pomegranite tinged newly needled scars. Picking up strangers, forever stalking men in bars.(Good stuff!) The emotional bleeder pathetically picking at scabs.('pathetically' is good, but I think it's superfluous,-scabs h…"
03 Sat

Critiqued
"A ghost (Else Lasker-Schüler tribute poem)" by @Ink Dragon
"This is is groove with mystery, perfect blend, with good pen. Only thing I halted at: ''longing for his fathers’ temples'',- my fetish with body parts said 'fingers', but I see it'll make it something different. Never m…"
03 Sat

Critiqued
"three days grace " by @Seren
"To me, it reads like a profound loss without equivalent cost. The two last stanzas told me me so, correct me if wrong. Yours, Espen."
03 Sat

Critiqued
"FAIRY FORTS / RING FORTS " by @ziggy
"Long time since I read this one, and it's still a gem. Keep this one close. Espen."
March 2010
30 Tue

Posted a poem
The Ocean
"The station bench was yours that day, a man approached "
Open thread 20 lines
28 Sun

Posted a poem
Just fine
"So fine, so good, handshake grips with gibes know no tale but "
Open thread 10 lines
24 Wed

Posted a poem
For reasons
"Pitch tar as the sea, primitive foam  labours in on this chosen beach"
Open thread 9 lines
22 Mon

Posted a poem
Window
"Black flags obscure the sun, signs play  the sky like the pages flipping through "
Open thread 16 lines
11 Thu

Posted a poem
The impossible course of action
"What a delicate thing the  Jagged edge of this knife is, "
Open thread 7 lines
09 Tue

Posted a poem
Cats and dogs
"These things don't want to be found! At least not now. At least not by us."
Open thread 21 lines
08 Mon

Posted a poem
An unpleasant noise
" "
Open thread 16 lines
03 Wed

Posted a poem
Pour until the paper floats
"A crumpled note, and a name from no one, nothing"
Open thread 19 lines
August 2009
26 Wed

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15 Sat

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August 2009 — 12 poems
07 Fri

First critique offered
on "BONFIRE OF SORROWS" by @Bonitaj
05 Wed

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Air Letter
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Joined Neopoet
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First poem published 1 days later.

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"Weather falling, feet grounded" by @J.Thomas

"ON THE BORDERLINE" by @Bonitaj

"ad nauseum" by @Seren

"Pest Hex" by @lyz

"ON THE BORDERLINE" by @Bonitaj

"A ghost (Else Lasker-Schüler tribute poem)" by @Ink Dragon

"three days grace " by @Seren

"FAIRY FORTS / RING FORTS " by @ziggy

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