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doorman
doorman
Aug 26, 2009 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Mercury

 
I'm the sunlit passerby

White collar, blue garb

I'm the beggar in praise

Worship a world from my leg up

Free of charge


I'm the darkened hands 

Lending weight in small trade

I am rotations of shoes on wheels

And tip toed high heel strut

Deep blood labia


I'm the click of a cracking nut

The black coffee I drink

Letter on my lap

A quaint, drumming finger tap


I am you


— doorman, Aug 26, 2009

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Country/Region: NOR

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Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Espen

Well my friend for me ? this is the best I have read of yours so far, it's brilliant I dont have the words to do it justice tonight ... great work .. love and hugz Jayne x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 11 months ago

hello

we haven't met before. You have a unique style of writing and I hope to read more of your interesting work in the future. Always, Cat
doorman

doorman

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Cat

I'm very pleased you like my style, Cat. I'll be honored if you'll take the time to read my writes. Happy to make your acquaintance. Sincerely, Espen.
doorman

doorman

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Anna

Thank you, Anna. You're a welcome guest in my house. Yours, Espen
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 11 months ago

Reminding me of:Guest House

Reminding me of: Guest House ~ Rumi This being human is a guest house. Every morning a new arrival. A joy, a depression, a meanness, some momentary awareness comes As an unexpected visitor. Welcome and entertain them all! Even if they're a crowd of sorrows, who violently sweep your house empty of its furniture, still treat each guest honorably. He may be clearing you out for some new delight. The dark thought, the shame, the malice, meet them at the door laughing, and invite them in. Be grateful for whoever comes, because each has been sent as a guide from beyond. Love & Light, Anna
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Hi Espen,

I am just flying by, but couldn't resist stopping here. What a great write, and such a fitting and intriguing title. Hope to see this one in Spotlight soon. Yours, ~Nina
Ravenshakti

Ravenshakti

16 years 11 months ago

Good medicine...

Hi Espen, I just had to come by and get my dose of Espen Magick. I could not resist... Like the Native Americans say; This poem is "good medicine". Raven
Ravenshakti

Ravenshakti

16 years 11 months ago

Good medicine...again...

Oh-Oh... My Good medicine comment went out twice... So... I'll just pretend I meant to send this extra comment... Ok? Ok. How are you doing today, Espen? I am fine, thank you. OK... I think that's it for now. Now we don't have a duplicate comment...just good medicine. Raven
Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Espen

I just logged into neopoet and found you in spotlight ... wonderful poem that deserved to be here !!! congratulations .. love and respect Jayne x x We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall ...
doorman

doorman

16 years 11 months ago

Dear Jayne

The spotlight, hmm.. I'll allow myself some pride. Wouldn't be there without you guys, though. So, thanks for putting me there! Yours, Espen.
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

And Now for evolution I

And Now for evolution I congratulate you LOL this is getting to be a habit Mr lol great work though this poem was really beautiful thought the first time round and its still a beautiful gem of a poem :) ... love and hugz Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...
Cloudthings

Cloudthings

16 years 10 months ago

As Rumi says "Say I am you" this is brilliant also

As Rumi says "Say I am you" this is brilliant also & it is late & I am too tired to sing your praises with the eloquence you deserve, but I am sure it has been done above... I will say merely how much I am enjoying everything I read of yours... My one query (nothing important) was about the "darken hand"... should it be darkened? I know not at all, & really it is such a slight the brilliance of the piece shines wonderfully... want it back in Spotlight, I see I missed that! I do love this so much... You are wonderful... We find ourselves everywhere don't we. Bet many wish they were YOU, talented sprite you are. Cheers Anni~ "A word is not the same with one writer as with another. One tears it from his guts. The other pulls it out of his overcoat pocket". ~Charles Peguy
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lyz

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Doorman

Did it again, CONGRATS. Not only do they breed good lookers in Norway, but great poets, writers, artists, or whatever you would like to be called, Always enjoy reading your work. From, damn!!!, married and old enough to be your mum, but still a fan, Lyz.
doorman

doorman

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Lyz

They breed pretty decent doormen here too. Thanks for checking in on my writes, Lyz. I truly appreciate your visits. Yours, Espen.
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 10 months ago

You've given it a good go there Espen!

As the Brits would say! and it has paid off!!! Well done! So good to see you in the SPOTLIGHT! I'm sure it won't be the last time! Great to have you on this site with us all! Bonita j
doorman

doorman

16 years 10 months ago

Bonita

Thanks Boni, Interesting experience to be in the limelight there. But it's the commentary from you and the others that in the end make the day. Yours, Espen
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odd molly

16 years 10 months ago

It was wonderful to get to

It was wonderful to get to your site and find this beautiful poem. This is the best I have read from you so far. I like the way you write. The simplest is often the most beautiful. Interesting and different and very special. odd molly
doorman

doorman

16 years 10 months ago

odd molly

Thanks again for stopping by to read. Good of you to mention you like this one the best. It was a bumpy write to work with, but it turned out ok in the end, I feel. Yours, Espen.
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ziggy

16 years 10 months ago

I LIKE THIS LOT

enda, patrick collins. HEY MAN, this is a fine write espen ,best i read of yours yet , your "the begger in praise" nicely done.
doorman

doorman

16 years 10 months ago

Ziggy

Once again, zig, thanks for lending an eye to my work. Your opinion is highly valued. All the best, Espen.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

This IS out of date but!

Are you? :- This is oddly fascinating with strange bits of sound and sight, human and concrete, I think the nut could CRACK!!! with a loud noise as clicking is more gentle. I like too the different sensations of touch, or feel, the BLACK coffee the light letter in your lap, must look up labia! "I’m the darken hands."....................(darken (ED) poetic yet not logic)  "I am rotations of shoes on wheels".......(I like this, oooo!) Yes write some more on this theme do please. Yours Ann of Norway
doorman

doorman

16 years 9 months ago

out of date, new thoughts

Hei Ann, Thanks for your comments on this one. I thought of a cracking sound as a series of connected clicks. Perhaps I need to write it a little differently to express that. A bit of a pickle to work out, though. I'm trying to expand my writing now, but I'll be back for the short stuff when I start missing it. Med vennlig hilsen, Espen.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

Bor du i norge?

Eller utenfor norge? Jeg er her i Oslo nå men har et hus i Flatdal Telemark. Autumn is coming and the trees are fussing about in their ochre coloured gowns getting quite het up in the Autumn winds. Het up- that's not far from the Norwegien het eg: hetebölgen, is it!! I didn't think of it before I wrote it down! Yours ogsa med vennlig hilsen Ann
doorman

doorman

16 years 9 months ago

Jeg er på gjennomreise.

Jeg er på gjennomreise. Besøker gamle venner, og kjenner at høsten begynner å bite. Oppholder meg på forskjellige steder for tiden, da jeg er på konstant reisefot. Godt å være tilbake igjen, dog kanskje litt sentimentalt. Da er vi de eneste vikingene her på Neopoet? Takk for at du leste diktet, og jeg ser frem til mer prat om poesi fremover. Vennlig hilsen, Espen.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 9 months ago

Orkney relatives

Hei pä deg Espen, They are perhaps the key to my feeling so at home in Norway because I am blooming British, but I KNOW that I have Viking blood in me. Oh won't it be fun finding out in the not too distant future whether we are Greek or Egyptian, or whatever from our DNA; genes? Did you know that some of the Irish are of Egyptian descent having first settled in Spain, what conundrums of places, we are people on this earth and the whole globe is our country, that's how i feel about it! If you leave Norway I am sure you long to be back? I did even though I had only been here for a year I could cry on the stage without prompting, and I didn't often cry, don't. And when I got here eventually 20 yrs later I kept pinching myself to see if it were really true, I just love nature and the natural peoples of this country, I have been here with a Dane 40 years sh!! I cannot write godt norsk, but am taken for having a norsk dialect by many Nowegians, so speak well with the right accent/song! Ha det bra og vennlig hilsen Ann Odd Molly is Swedish then, or doesn't she count as a Viking?

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