ad nauseum

my sorrow bears
leaves of jacaranda
purple eyes the flower,

the fear,
a dank damp cloth of night
covered my face

smothering

the lust
that quivered
a human lake

moving

a specter's hands
stole Mercury's face
of banality

together

the fear,
hands
lust

disassembled

— Seren, Mar 12, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

judyanne

16 years 2 months ago

i’m really having trouble

i'm really having trouble reading into the context of this JC. the jacaranda flower that smothers the green of the tree seems to be the key. 'a dank damp cloth of night... the fear, hands lust mistrust' all in all I feel on edge when i read it. i don't like the feeling and if this is what you meant to convey then it is a great write as usual and i'll never enjoy the sight of my jacaranda quite as much again. luv judd xx

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Judd

Was contemplating this one last night wasnt sure whether to post,if you felt unsettled ? well that how you were meant to feel ... would rather not explain it just yet shall see if anyone twigs or maybe I have been too obscure ... thanks for the support love Jayne-Chloe x x x

Lonnie

16 years 2 months ago

Not familiar with Jacaranda, but I like this poem!

You always write very profound and moving poetry, and this particular piece is no exception! If there is any critique at all, it would be to say I wanted to read more!

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear Lonnie

Thanks for your comment this is only the beginning of events that changed my life forever ... the Jacaranda is a tree and quite beautiful, but for me the scent makes me nauseated ... not sure if anyone gets the context .... but a friend told me to post so I did lol will do an edit in the next couple of days love and hugs Jayne-Chloe

the_fool

16 years 2 months ago

love the title especially

jagged but still fits together beautifully. brilliant

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Dear T-F

thanks for the comment sorry about the delay in answering forgot to check these ones my emails screwed up at the minute lol glad you liked it still needs some work love Jayne-Chloe

doorman

16 years 2 months ago

This is a fucking good

This is a fucking good gathering of words. Espen.

Seren

16 years 2 months ago

I will take fucking good

I will take fucking good anyday I can get it Espen thanks for the read and the comment big smiles ... if you get time later read the next one I post about 6 hours from now I think lol love Jaycee x x x