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Lunegirl
Mar 03, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

In finding you i lost myself

you smile gold plated words
i weep in their ashes
at the feet of reality
you pound lust and fury upon my soul
hologram and shadow
in finding you i lost myself
searched so hard, vanished along the way
i ain't got nowhere to go now
only feet to run

your all baggy long johns and easy eyes
smelling of Stella and whats to come
silent statements and shared acknowledgments
you got me dancing on tiptoes to reach our dreams
stumbling over the eggshells of our relationship
stretching out cold fingertips for fewer kisses
and all the while make believes coming a courting
battering the merry go round.

Covered in soot and charm
fears and puppet strings
pretension leaks
and we're all undone

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Seren

16 years 2 months ago

Bravo Vix you fucking nailed

Bravo Vix you fucking nailed it with this one,you dare touch it I am going to come smack you lol ... seriously its a brilliant write my new favourite of yours love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Lunegirl

16 years 2 months ago

Thankyou, this one wasn’t

Thankyou, this one wasn't about D.M im not sure if i got that across though, im thinking one line in particular could be misconstrued lol, (stella) I have been talking to some others about the DM project of publishing for charity and its a work in progress, anyone can add. The others in my seris are finished now and together with the first one. Trends fluctuate and i think in doing this project it started off a ball rolling and encouraged others to write about the things that have shaped their lives. Not always but often poets have been through something big. ( i believe) and i think that it really takes courage to write about experiences that are so big and harmful. It can be uncomftable to read about things that hurt someone but then again, poetry is about making the reader feel, good or bad eh? This poem is about my littlest childs father. he is a musicision and he just left us, before she was born. He never did anything else, just left. What doesnt break us makes us iron huh : ) vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Optimism in adversity

Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes Yes indeed it does and I work with these people MEN AND WOMEN ELDERLY AND CHILDREN and it is really unbelievable when I see and hear the things I do. Most bothersome when I see pictures of children bloodied and broken at the hands of a father or mother and then the elderly in wheelchairs that can not defend themselves at the hands of their own children. I deal with this on a constant basis first hand, and it is not only woman that get abused MANY men have been abused from their wife, girlfriend, etc. It is just not all about the woman being abused, you would be astounded to see how many men file this paperwork from the woman, Unbelievable. Crazy world we live in and I always say stay in the driver seat at all times, for when you give someone control over your life then you can not drive that car anywhere. enough said and thanks vix for what you do also, love magics02 Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
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Lunegirl

16 years 2 months ago

Yes of course, i feel bad

Yes of course, i feel bad for concentrating on woman, but i guess thats because ive come from my own perspective. Many men are treated dreadfully as well by wman and then of course same sex relationships have their own statisics on abuse. Its brilliant you support and encourage people that have been hurt so much. I used to say never me after seeing my dad. but then a i met a man who was sooo sooo lovely for 10 months and very little by very little, you know the odd comment about how a differrent dress would look better, slight things to chip away at the confidence. till the physical stuff started and of course he was sooo sorry, by then the mental wheels are in place for this to happen. I really was tough on myself for a long long time about how i let that happen, but there is lots of physchological stuff involved in abusive relationships as im sure you are aware of. Thanks for your comments and feedbacka and support!! : ) love vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

Yes for sure

Someday I will share my story and how I arose from it also. And you are so correct same sex relationships sometimes are so brutal also. I have had to look at butcher knives in backs of men with gory details, children with broken noses and swollen faces and it horrifies me but I do my job, many people get up and hug me as I try to tell them to get back in the driver's seat of their lives and take control, Yes the mental abuse is just or maybe equivalent to the physical and when you have them both it can make a soul and body very ill. No one deserves to be violated and I have many a poem in my journal books to enter here soon. Someone has to stand up in a court of law against the abusers and for the victims and our Judges do not take this so lightly as it is definetly a violation of a human being. No male or female should be at the helm of an abuser by no means, when the red flags go up it is time to be courageous and get out as the signs are real and forthcoming for worse to be. I know I have been there. Until later my friend you take loving care of yourself for no one else can do that better for you then YOU!!! Love and Peace my friend,keep the spirit of love alive and you shall survive. Magics02 xoxoxoxoxo Learn to live, learn to forgive. Life is too short.
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

Fear of treading on someones

Fear of treading on someones toes and the outcome of speaking out can be difficult...`treading on egg shells`. Rosina xena465
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Lunegirl

16 years 2 months ago

Hey you!!Ive been thinking i

Hey you!! Ive been thinking i really must catch up with your work, i havent been on as much, been a bit unwell with broncitus, This piece is about the fear i felt at losing this person. In a way it hurt more then the partner that administered the domestic violence. I learned to expect that. I didnt expect this partner to leave us. I decided to share these personal aspects of my life in these comments so that the reader might make more sence of the poem. and yes treading on egg shell, relationships can be so delicate!! vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes
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magics02

16 years 2 months ago

True Rosina

Your statement is true but it can be spoken about with and in respect. It is when we lose sight of that it becomes neglectful or hurtful.. Or ego for that matter, There is a way to go about things that are sensitive in nature and heart, only if people could associate themselves in being in that same persons shoe. Some things are one sided in life as some only see the glass half full and others see it full if you get my drift. I hope this day is finding you feeling better and smile awhile and write your good poetry, forget about all the adversity, do what you do best and that is welcome people here with the warm, genuine honest person that you are. and write your stuff, :) LOve and Peace Mona.
xena465

xena465

16 years 2 months ago

It’s strange Mona that my

It's strange Mona that my post today is about abuse in the matrimonial home. We must all be thinking alike today. I'm doing just fine now too...thanks. Rosina xena465
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Lunegirl

16 years 2 months ago

Oh, thankyou so much, its

Oh, thankyou so much, its always the ones i think arnt so great that people love : ) bit rough and raw around the edges but honest. cheers for the feed back :) vix Optimism in adversity nutures positive outcomes