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Mar 30, 2010
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The Ocean
The station bench was yours
that day, a man approached
with backward stare, sat down
beside, began to talk of what
you couldn't hear, his eyes wet;
''I have a gun in my mouth'',
they said, he spoke, you listened,
nothing, and walked away
whispering; ''I don't care''
''When shadow is a bastard
sun, breathes dirt among the
nesting worms on branches
underground, what sun counts
passerby's too slow for flickering
strings of trains, greying eyes,
or strobes in misty nightclubs?''
Dark is treading water now, and
all around you careful feet lift, dip
past snakes and thorns,- and out
into the ocean.
— doorman, Mar 30, 2010
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Critiques
lyz
16 years 2 months ago
Dear Espen
Kailashana
16 years 2 months ago
Thank you for writing this.
Seren
16 years 2 months ago
Dear Espen
J.Thomas
16 years 2 months ago
I get severe images when
panaella
16 years 2 months ago
amazing depth...
doorman
16 years 2 months ago
Thank you all!
Ink Dragon
16 years 2 months ago
When shadow is a bastard/sun...
lyz
16 years 2 months ago
Yes