dhruv

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An Epitaph

Posted Sep 4, 2011 · 39 lines · 6 critiques

The digits, that reached you
Behind a strip of red
Hiding, just as you
Lifeless.
The end, unwritten,
In one last cold breath.

Perhaps, your greatest trick
Was convincing me
That you never existed at all?

I remember
Alone in an alien town, with you
Drenched in one another’s tones
Your eyes, filled with affection
Mine overflowing with longing

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A breakfast we will never forget
An evening we can’t help but remember

My screams bounce off your spine
Your cruel words, unchanged, unscathed.
In your darkest times, you held on to my collar
The very collar you let go
Into the ocean, with absolute
Conviction of your actions
Just when I needed you the most.

Not expecting a testimony,
Notwithstanding, the truth
This may have been your decision,
But you were always a better friend
Than my love, my love
But you’ve left me confused, wondering
Which one of those faces defaced me
And rendered me incapable of existing..

Here lies, your best friend
Your elefriend
Slowly shedding skin
In a decomposing exterior
Losing momentum and mass
Here lies.. your panda,
but I realise
That’s not me no more.

dhruv’s timeline

March 2023
11 Sat

Anniversary
15 years of membership
March 2018
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Anniversary
10 years of membership
December 2014
30 Tue

Received a critique
on status quo from @Ian.T
"As the original comment was from someone that has left, this piece has now been highlighted as un-discovered, So we need to go through it again and see what we can do. I found it a little abrupt and broken in a couple o…"
March 2013
11 Mon

Anniversary
5 years of membership
September 2011
05 Mon

Received a critique
on An Epitaph from @weirdelf
"If you needed to write it you needed it read. Enough said."
05 Mon

Received a critique
on An Epitaph from @Geezer
"says, I am baffled by the first stanza. I have trouble figuring out just what you mean. I'm thinking that you are sitting across from the girl trying to hold her hand, but she doesn't let you? The rest of the poem flowe…"
05 Mon

Received a critique
on An Epitaph from @weirdelf
"read this as prose It's a victim poem. Sorry but it is. I've got no patience for women who make themselves victims. Cut his ballls off."
04 Sun

Critiqued
"To Ken, a good man" by @weirdelf
"it's amazing how you take something so simple and write something so beautiful around it. this particular piece has no complexities attached to it, and I think that's what's so attractive about it in the first place. ps…"
04 Sun

Posted a poem
An Epitaph
"The digits, that reached you"
Open thread 39 lines
August 2011
28 Sun

Received a critique
on Iredescent from @weirdelf
"perhaps a bit plaintiff. I think you know the answer, which doesn't depend on how others see you and you could express it more forcefully in the ending. iridescence [spelling]"
27 Sat

Received a critique
on Psychotic Release (intended for 18+ owing to the language) from @weirdelf
"(trust me, it doesn't work) [grins] I love this. Give me passion, even dark and evil. The spelling errors work, enhancing the "rant aspect. Not a poem I would read to kids, but it works for me."
26 Fri

Received a critique
on Psychotic Release (intended for 18+ owing to the language) from @raj
"as Rosi has commented above...i too believe you have gone for an overkill ..perhaps you wanted to express the frenzy in the act of love making ...so it seems...in the bargain this write is neither sensual..nor erotic…"
26 Fri

Received a critique
on Psychotic Release (intended for 18+ owing to the language) from @raj
"it has always been nice to meet you too Rosina...in the end we are all human beings...Homo Sapiens..i treasure the friendship bonds we have established here..."
19 Fri

Posted a poem
Iredescent
"deviously iridescent"
Open thread 49 lines
18 Thu

Posted a poem
Memoirs
"like a flower;"
Open thread 10 lines
16 Tue

Posted a poem
The Denouement
"(following http://new.neopoet.com/node/encore )"
Open thread 42 lines
14 Sun

Posted a poem
The Encore
"(following http://new.neopoet.com/node/broadway-lovesick-puppies )"
Open thread 33 lines
09 Tue

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Broadway for Lovesick Puppies
"A silver stage,"
Open thread 11 lines
November 2010
08 Mon

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status quo
"a pair of eyes"
Open thread 29 lines
June 2010
03 Thu

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Utopia
"I dreamt that I dreamt of a different world,"
Open thread 39 lines
April 2010
13 Tue

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fide et amor
"Desperately gasping"
Open thread 37 lines
11 Sun

Critiqued
"Snowflake" by @xena465
"moving.. i love what i see! the imagery is inexplicably perfect :)"
March 2010
31 Wed

Critiqued
"Omega :" by @Draki
"dark only begins to define how lovely it is. the irony in the sentence tells the story of its brilliance. an amazing write!"
31 Wed

Posted a poem
A Portrait of Perfection
"With grace that heaven couldn't deny"
Open thread 38 lines
22 Mon

Posted a poem
psychotic break
"i spoke of a diverging road"
Open thread 38 lines
06 Sat

Posted a poem
a warm night
"I looked up.. it was raining, and it was raining hard. thousands of cold water drops pierced through my skin. It was ironic how the icy drops of water felt like trickles of flame, burning through every inch they could reach. They were almost sneaking up on me.. the fog hid them well. And yet, even though the pain was almost unbearable, I found my feet cemented on the ground. I did not want to go back.. I did not want it to stop. I needed this.. I craved it."
Open thread 6 lines
February 2010
23 Tue

Critiqued
"matters of policy " by @weirdelf
"hail and bliss.. hail and bliss! :) fine, fine write. pleasure reading it!"
June 2009
20 Sat

Critiqued
"Expoetation" by @weirdelf
"great write. i've been feeling the same way since the past few weeks and i feel at the core of the composition. hope you remember me, jess."
March 2009
11 Wed

Anniversary
One year of membership
September 2008
17 Wed

Critiqued
"Feelings" by @nik
"hey nik very well written, this. the inconsistency in english is actually quite helping it. looking forward to more such poetry from you!"
08 Mon

Critiqued
"Love and Pain" by @Barbara Writes
"oh wow, you blew me away with this one. very well written. i simply adore the imagery!"
08 Mon

Critiqued
"The Memory Box" by @purplemoondoll
"excellent, marvelous, fabulous, delightful. i seem to have run out of words. let me add that you're extremely lucky, being able to stuff so many memories into a box so small, which seems, forgive me, rather preposterous…"
March 2008
16 Sun

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March 2008 — 10 poems
12 Wed

First critique offered
on "The Apparition" by @bayoujeanette
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First publication
The Scarlet Incantation
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on status quo from @Ian.T

5 years of membership

on An Epitaph from @weirdelf

on An Epitaph from @Geezer

on An Epitaph from @weirdelf

"To Ken, a good man" by @weirdelf

on Iredescent from @weirdelf

on Psychotic Release (intended for 18+ owing to the language) from @weirdelf

on Psychotic Release (intended for 18+ owing to the language) from @raj

on Psychotic Release (intended for 18+ owing to the language) from @raj

"Snowflake" by @xena465

"Omega :" by @Draki

"matters of policy " by @weirdelf

"Expoetation" by @weirdelf

One year of membership

"Feelings" by @nik

"Love and Pain" by @Barbara Writes

"The Memory Box" by @purplemoondoll

March 2008 — 10 poems

on "The Apparition" by @bayoujeanette

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