Dark_Death

Member since January 7, 2010

Member for 16 years, 4 months

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12 Poems

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Self Conflict

Posted May 2, 2012 · 8 lines · 3 critiques

Dazed with pitiful bleary eyes
Spirit hopeless but in disguise
He acts strong but inside he cries
His life he wish he could revise
Bound to fail even if he tries
Anger explodes with no surprise
Blood an tears will fall as heart beat rise
Then fall asleep and meet his demise

Dark_Death’s timeline

January 2025
06 Mon

Anniversary
15 years of membership
January 2020
06 Mon

Anniversary
10 years of membership
January 2015
06 Tue

Anniversary
5 years of membership
May 2012
03 Thu

Received a critique
on Self Conflict from @Candlewitch
"I much like these lines: His life he wish he could revise Bound to fail even if he tries Anger explodes with no surprise I also agree with the suggested changes by Rula. always, Cat"
03 Thu

Received a critique
on Self Conflict from @Rula
"A nice piece to detect the human feelings and what sometimes we intentionally like to hide or show. I believe this is something human ..I like the opening two lines very much Dazed with pitiful bleary eyes Spirit hopele…"
02 Wed

Posted a poem
Self Conflict
"Dazed with pitiful bleary eyes"
Open thread 8 lines
November 2011
12 Sat

Received a critique
on Abuse from @lou
"I like the theme and each stanza rhymes well, but they are little like lists, there might be little more flow if the third stanza rhymed with the first and fourth stanza with the second. lou"
11 Fri

Posted a poem
Abuse
"He Lives with more than one abuser"
Open thread 12 lines
January 2011
06 Thu

Anniversary
One year of membership
February 2010
11 Thu

Posted a poem
Dream
"Lately shit and words just won’t get threw"
Open thread 16 lines
11 Thu

Received a critique
on Disarray from @the_fool
"rhyming patterns off with water daughter water and it's a bit teen-age angst cliche. if you really feel that way, read some bukowski or vonnegut. i guarantee you'll perk up. and never stop writing. haveing the balls to…"
10 Wed

Critiqued
"At a loss for love" by @sunscreen
"i can relate to some of that. nice work dude"
10 Wed

Posted a poem
Disarray
"Feel all hot and the tears starting to flow"
Open thread 13 lines
07 Sun

Received a critique
on Depression from @poewriter58
"Very accurate description of Depression. As I see it you have taken the first step toward healing by getting it out of you writing is the best outlet so do not give it or anything up Chrys"
January 2010
24 Sun

Posted a poem
Depression
"Chest hurts with intense pain, with my stomach sickening"
Open thread 21 lines
20 Wed

Received a critique
on Edge Of Self Destruction from @sunscreen
"Don’t believe a god, who to ask why am I here? (Don't believe in a god?) Other then that very good write, looking forward to see more of your work :)"
20 Wed

Critiqued
"Away in a dream" by @Silent_Rain
"beautiful, definitely beautiful. i can relate to it in a way, just wishing to get away from all the crap and picture a decent world away from sorrows. great work"
20 Wed

Critiqued
"Fate's twisted ankle" by @Ink Dragon
"o.o are you the professional on this sight? cuz it sure seems like it o.o great work!"
20 Wed

Critiqued
"feeling betrayed" by @sunscreen
"in dragon is right, but still this is pretty good =)"
20 Wed

Posted a poem
Edge Of Self Destruction
"Becoming weaker and weaker, I’m becoming defenseless"
Open thread 15 lines
17 Sun

Received a critique
on Lost from @sunscreen
"I had a crazy dream the other day, it was something like that.... Very well done."
16 Sat

Posted a poem
Lost
"This is completely crazy"
Open thread 18 lines
15 Fri

Received a critique
on Returned Addiction from @sunscreen
"Its never a good habbit, I sincerely hope, this write isn't about you :)"
15 Fri

Highest posting month
January 2010 — 8 poems
13 Wed

Critiqued
"Monster" by @Silent_Rain
"i like it, reminds me of a few of different dreams i had lately. i agree with indiscretionate it is a good rhythm. and its different than what i usually see, good job"
13 Wed

Posted a poem
Returned Addiction
"Alcohols appearing"
Open thread 17 lines
13 Wed

Critiqued
"Old Fashioned Fixtures " by @Morgana Tragic Proprietress
"dang i dont even know what to say.... i liked it alot o.o imma probably come back and read this a cupple more times rofl"
12 Tue

Posted a poem
I Dont Understand
"Talking back to my parents, they don’t like my tone"
Open thread 16 lines
12 Tue

Critiqued
"The passion we share" by @sunscreen
"i like it, its touching and has good emotion in it. i read on a cupple other of your work and i like them alot. this 1 pops out at me the most (not that i looked at them all.. yet =P ) but its just a personal thing i lo…"
11 Mon

Critiqued
"Being Me" by @ifoundaplace
"i like alot how u got descriptive with it and described everything nicely. also to me atleast seems kinda motivational sayin like, basically that u wanna be yourself and your going to and it would be nice if others woul…"
11 Mon

Posted a poem
Special Kid
"Placed out of L.D class in grade seven"
Open thread 15 lines
11 Mon

First critique offered
on "Sorry" by @Silent_Rain
10 Sun

Most-discussed work
No Eyes

11 critiques to date.
10 Sun

Posted a poem
No Eyes
"I walk this earth in search for a cure"
Open thread 39 lines
06 Wed

First publication
What Am I?
06 Wed

Posted a poem
What Am I?
"Trying to get out of here with spry"
Open thread 16 lines
06 Wed

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.