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I liked this alot Rain, I was moved greatly. I liked your usage. I do have a suggestion or two. I hope you don't mind, I will copy and paste to show you what I mean. but I could not find the words to say For this lines flow, Like when you say it out loud, needs to lose a couple of sylables for your timing. So I suggest using a contraction to achieve that. but I couldn't find the words to say. flows better. Just an opinion. In your second stanza you have or how you got that way it doesn’t ever matter I think you probably meant even, Next. Your last two stanza last line both start with and. And this will make more sense when I give you my last advice. But for this I recommend changing the first word of the last line to, so. Now my last advice is for your repetition. In all of your stanzas you start with an I statement, except your 3rd. In my opinion if you used another I statement. It would carry the repetition the whole way through. These are all just opinions, and I wouldn't have took the time to give them if I didn't like the poem Rain. I really do. So take what you need and keep writng, your good. Julie D.D.

I'm not rating poems. I just read the ones that catch my eyes.I liked your poem. Keep writing and learning. This site can help you. I also like your name, Silent Rain

I really like it. Great job :) Dani :)

I really like it. Great job :) Dani :)

dang lol it may be because i had a hard day and kinda emotional from it, but that kinda made me tear up a bit (hehehe that sounds so lame, but true) i like it alot and think its great. good job =)