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Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

Dearest Nina

I have read Anns neophases and now this one ... big smile Nina ... brilliant minds your two have its funny I always thought of the moon as male as well dont ask me why lol love and mountains of hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

How funny!

Haha, Jayne, where did you pick that up? Male moons, the very idea! :P Yours, ~Nina
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hillrider

16 years 3 months ago

*The man in the moon*

Interesting topic Nina, and I agree that for me as well He will always be of "green cheese" and male gender. 8) Indi
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 3 months ago

A male moon ...

I am thinking now - a male moon. How utterly delicious. I enjoyed this very much. *smile* Wow. A MALE MOON. I think I am going to like a male moon. ~Pamela
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Pam,

the moon theme was an idea that Ann brought up, suggesting that we should write a moon poem each. I'd love to see a moon poem by you, so why not join us in our little folly? Yours, ~Nina
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 3 months ago

I will do that

I love the moon but am not too familiar with the phases and their meaning, but I can write of the moon. Thank you for the invitation to do so. *smile*
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Great!

I'll be looking forward to your moon poem :) Yours, ~Nina
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Idlemindwondering

16 years 3 months ago

The moon

to me, as a child, was male as - indiscretionate - mentioned above "the man in the moon" but over the years the fiery chariot of the sun has long sought the soft curve of the moon's grace and romantic light. I think she will remain with me - I like her. :) Wonderful words ken
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you, Ken,

this is a little beauty of a comment. A pleasure to find it here :) Yours, ~Nina P.S. We need more moon poems... how about one from you?
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Idlemindwondering

16 years 3 months ago

I will

give you something old the work on something new; but first I must go be a dad Ask the Moon (Kyrielle Sonnet) Moon etched horizon's silhouette as a young and eager night spoke; we danced a rhythmic pirouette when in my eyes true love awoke. Then quietly you captured me; played softer notes as songs evoke fear locked dreams of long guarded key when in my eyes true love awoke. Dancers lingered - music expelled moments that silent words provoke; and a turn stopped, your face beheld when in my eyes true love awoke. Moon etched horizon's silhouette when in my eyes true love awoke.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Ken,

this one's a beauty too, but I loved the pale moon even more :) Yours, ~Nina
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Idlemindwondering

16 years 3 months ago

ya

this one was only a place holder :P
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 3 months ago

What an interesting topic!

My sense is that there is A MAN in the moon - but he's merely a guest tettering on the edge of one of the FEMALE moon's craters ;)i.e. he is a tentative visitor!!! Cheers Boni
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Boni,

I'm laughing my bum off, you clever little wordcrafter :D Thanks for stopping by! Yours, ~Nina Note: little is a term of endearment, my best friend started that a long time ago, and I can't get the habit out of my system :)
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 3 months ago

That was quick too dear Nina

You are my moonshine, my only moonshine... "The man in the moon came down too soon, and asked his way to Norwich, They sent him south and he burnt his mouth By eating cold pease porridge.".............Mother Goose! If the moon is male then it is the female in a male, as his glow is so gentle, and the atmosphere so delicate, colours monotone, the light so bright and beautiful, yes if you like, but I repeat, the feminine traits of masculinity. Oh moon what gender are you there flying high in the free free air, we contemplate your beauty, still, you hang there like a lantern, thrill our minds, our eyes adore you're mystery no more. And yet what is your name what was it once before, when humans first set eyes on you what did you say or do? You were just round and beautiful, of silver shining hue, and we can stare and stare at you until we loose our zeal. And some more from Ann.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Ann,

you are the mistress of impromptu poetry. Thank you for this beautiful comment. Yours, ~Nina
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Quillsvein1

16 years 3 months ago

You're a long

way from Marge Piercy, and I can't say that I mind all that much--"My first language was German/so the moon will forever remain/male to me.." I'll bet. I've always wanted to read Paul Celan in the original, and I tried to learn German once: the crackling testosterone of the language immediately struck me. TOD! Excellent poem, good job here and a courageous departure from the PC norm.
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Paul Celan...

quill, let me know which your favourite Celan write is and I will gladly dig it up and translate it. (Getting more and more into translating of late.) I'm amazed and floored that this little off the cuff write is received so well here. Thanks for dropping by. Yours, ~Nina
sunscreen

sunscreen

16 years 3 months ago

Agreed

The man on the moon says it all the moon must be a male! I've no witty logic to prove my point, I'll leave that to you guys :)
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 3 months ago

Nah!

Hey Mr. Sun blocker ... check out my comment 5 stops up - sorry for you... the moon is a chic ;) Just kidding - but read my message and you'll figure out my logic! Cheers Bonita j
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Sunblocker,

always a pleasure to have you drop by :) Don't pick a fight with my fierce poetess friend Bonita, if she says the moon is female, it is ;) Boni, your comment provided a much needed laugh, thanks. Yours, ~Nina
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 3 months ago

so das Mädchen is a neuter?

Anyway, I can't see a man in the moon, I see a rabbit jumping over a log, isn't it obvious? Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

The moon is a rabbit!

Mystery solved! Thanks for the laugh, Jess. Das Mädchen is female, as "natural gender" overrides "grammatical gender", by the way. But tables and chairs are male and cutlery is altogether confusing, as it is das Messer, der Löffel, die Gabel. Funny language, German! Yours, ~Nina
deelilah

deelilah

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Nina

This has been a fun discussion. I took Spanish, a little French, and a little Latin (which I think is closer to German with the declensions and all), so I am familiar with the masculine and feminine endings, which don't always seem to fit, at times not at all intuitive. I grew up hearing a lot of German (maternal grandparents came from Germany), and I am struck, as someone above mentioned, how masculine it sounds. You have an amazing grasp of English. I cannot tell that it is not your first language. 'Where does language start where does perception end?' So true, so true. Not sure, I think I think of a male moon. I know I like moon metaphor. 'Watch out for the lady over the road who drives deep into those cavernous hours, lost in the stars, content in her own thoughts, talking pure trash to the man in the moon.' Always, Deelilah
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Ink Dragon

16 years 3 months ago

Dear Dee,

I remember that poem of yours, it's one of my favourites! Gender is indeed one of the hardest things to learn, especially if your native language does not use it or uses different patterns. Good to know I don't make too many mistakes when I'm speaking English, but as I said elsewhere: I'd better speak English well, or how could I teach it? Yours, ~Nina