jetz

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Check mate ***language

Posted Jul 19, 2020 · 52 lines · 1 critiques

She hated red
but wore it well.
It changed her mood,
and you could tell.

The dress, way short,
cut real low,
left no question
how far she'd go.

The 'fuck me' heels
were crazy tall,
if she happens to slip
she'll probably fall.

But in she sauntered
head held high.

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Saw him there
but walked on by.

That other woman
did a double take.
She acted brave -
that's hard to fake.

She need not worry,
no, not tonight.
Lady in red
wasn't there to fight.

She walked to the bar,
ordered a drink.
All eyes upon her
who cares what they think.

Tonight things are different,
tonight things will change.
Come hell or high water,
she's playing HIS game.

"Eanie, meanie," inside her head,
she slowly scanned the crowd
Then suddenly she saw the one
"I'll take you," she said out loud

The pocket protector clinched it.
The bow tie and bald head a plus.
Four foot eleven, both high and wide,
oh yah, this guys a must.

She took him by the hand
He thought he'd gone to heaven
He smiled a toothless grin
said; "hi baby, my name is Kevin."

I saw them 2 months later.
Shopping at the grocery store.
The cart was full of lobster,
champagne and nothing more.

Oh yea, they sure look happy,
her and what's his name.
With a wink and a hug, she whispered,
"he played, but I won the game."

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August 2024
19 Mon

Anniversary
15 years of membership
August 2020
11 Tue

Critiqued
"Mute Question (Tanka Couplet)" by @raj
"you devil you."
July 2020
29 Wed

Critiqued
"Ghost" by @LorienLord
"as are you, LL. chambers dark where ghostly lovers left their mark white sheets lay crumpled on the floor cobwebs hang across the door and ravens cry out " Nevermore ", Yummy."
23 Thu

Critiqued
"The Soul That God Forgot" by @Alan S Jeeves
"Alan, but a fine poem it is. I don't know the background story but that didn't affect the read. Much enjoyed. Sue"
23 Thu

Critiqued
"DISCONNECTED" by @scribbler
"said Stan, I'm sorry for your loss. It's nearly 3 years since I lost my best friend and the pain is still very real. We have our memories and those will have to suffice. Your poem is a wonderful tribute."
20 Mon

Received a critique
on Check mate ***language from @Gracy
"Hi jetz, very good. The title is fine and the content deftly written. Also well rhymed. The Scarlett Woman is well defined...lol. Highly original topic, you gave me a laugh. Best, Gracy"
19 Sun

Posted a poem
Check mate ***language
"She hated red"
Open thread 52 lines
12 Sun

Critiqued
"White Sails" by @c lynn brooks
"You can't go wrong with ocean and song. I feel as if I have read this before. Perhaps it the images you paint with your words. All things I love. Very nice. Sue Not that anyone asked but my vote is no on the 'tis. Sorry…"
12 Sun

Received a critique
on The Lost from @c lynn brooks
"I hear you and yes I believe we were all here at one time or another well wriiten piece of work gives one puse at what answer they would have"
12 Sun

Received a critique
on The Lost from @Geezer
"lost a lot lately. You are right; the world just doesn't seem the same anymore. You have summed it up very well. Maybe it's the masks everryone is wearing. Sometimes, I look at people I've know all my life and wonder if…"
12 Sun

Posted a poem
The Lost
"Have you ever felt like you"
Open thread 42 lines
12 Sun

Critiqued
"Before the fire ceases (Idle time workshop)" by @raj
"Your title is awesome Raj. A subject all too familiar to us aging 'embers.' The end does feel a bit off as Stan pointed out. I'd like to see you work your title in there. Just a comment., not an order. :) Have I told yo…"
11 Sat

Received a critique
on The Song I Couldn't Write from @scribbler
"intense? well compared to other sites maybe so"
09 Thu

Received a critique
on The Song I Couldn't Write from @scribbler
"They come out sounds like an actual creature coming out to me. While the other way it seems they are transformed. but it's Your poem so all I do is throw out alternatives, it's up to you whether they work for you or not"
09 Thu

Received a critique
on The Song I Couldn't Write from @raj
"It was a pleasant experience to read this free flowing poem and feel it..its rhythm and the effect.of peace and harmony the words created.... be well.."
09 Thu

Received a critique
on R.I.P. Whiskey Lullaby from @Geezer
"would realize that what I was doing was giving you those lines that I thought needed a little change, but instead, it came out looking like I wanted you to condense it and make it shorter. Believe me, I absolutely loved…"
08 Wed

Critiqued
"A Candle in the Night" by @raj
"I am happy to see you. Glad you returned at a time I'm here. I like this a lot. Very delicate and very romantic. Candle light, you can't lose. Sue"
08 Wed

Received a critique
on The Song I Couldn't Write from @Geezer
"this one. Don't know how it could have happened. Must be the lack of sleep; with all those damned fireworks the past week. Anyway, I really like this and yes, I wanted a longer poem and got what I asked for. I agree wit…"
06 Mon

Posted a poem
R.I.P. Whiskey Lullaby
"How fitting that it's cloudy"
Open thread 40 lines
05 Sun

Critiqued
"Horsing Around..." by @Geezer
"The changes you made were/are perfect. I see I was the minority on the title change which is fine by me, it just made me giggle. It's a cool story and I do love story poems. I do hope to be around a little more to read…"
04 Sat

Posted a poem
The Song I Couldn't Write
"Inside my head the tune does play"
Open thread 33 lines
03 Fri

Posted a poem
The Sound Of Love
"You have written"
Open thread 7 lines
June 2020
07 Sun

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Wet
"Your words of love"
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June 2019
18 Tue

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From Time To Time
"He drinks a little"
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The Bell
"Again tonight a hazy hue"
Open thread 32 lines
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Sundial
"Sundial"
Open thread 9 lines
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All I Think About Is You
"                   All I Think About Is You "
Open thread 28 lines
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Cry
"       Cry"
Open thread 35 lines
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Dear Abby
"         Dear Abby?"
Open thread 23 lines
May 2010
27 Thu

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Smile... and say goodbye.........losing a friend is never easy

17 critiques to date.
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Highest posting month
May 2010 — 9 poems
August 2009
28 Fri

First publication
The Writer
28 Fri

First critique offered
on "OCD" by @Hooded Stranger
19 Wed

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 9 days later.

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15 years of membership

"Mute Question (Tanka Couplet)" by @raj

"Ghost" by @LorienLord

"The Soul That God Forgot" by @Alan S Jeeves

"DISCONNECTED" by @scribbler

on Check mate ***language from @Gracy

"White Sails" by @c lynn brooks

on The Lost from @c lynn brooks

on The Lost from @Geezer

"Before the fire ceases (Idle time workshop)" by @raj

on The Song I Couldn't Write from @scribbler

on The Song I Couldn't Write from @scribbler

on The Song I Couldn't Write from @raj

on R.I.P. Whiskey Lullaby from @Geezer

"A Candle in the Night" by @raj

on The Song I Couldn't Write from @Geezer

"Horsing Around..." by @Geezer

10 years of membership

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One year of membership

May 2010 — 9 poems

on "OCD" by @Hooded Stranger

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