Sunrise

Sunrise

No blanket
no sun screen
no need....
the sun is about to rise

I plant my ass
in the sand
and breathe in
the scents one
can only find at
the shore

The sand feels
damp ..
though my toes
discover a left over
warmth

Little sand castles
"toe made."
Eye on the horizon
as new crayola
colors form
in the distance

This time
this place
this smell..

to be shared.

My thoughts are of you.

Sue

— jetz, Dec 08, 2009

About This Poem

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Region, Country: South eastern Connecticut, USA

Critiques

magics02

16 years 6 months ago

lOVE IT!!

I got to say this is the best one today I read. I so love the sun, sand, horizons...very well written, enjoyed it very much. magics02

jetz

16 years 5 months ago

Magic, Thank you for such a nice response. I am usually out of my comfort zone without rhyme, but, it seems, for one to fit in amoung the writers of todays world, one needs to adapt. I dabble there...that scary non rhyming world, on occasion. I remember this morning..THIS sunrise well. Once again, thanks for the read and reply. Sue

Tony Udo

16 years 6 months ago

Sunrise

I feel just as if I was there.(In case you needed any help with the planting)

jetz

16 years 5 months ago

ROR….= raff out roud!!!!

ROR....= raff out roud!!!! You made me smile when I read your reply...I do so love your sense of humor. Actually, I love your sense of life. Planting ...I did on my own..before you know it you will be telling me my ass looks big in this forum!! Thanks, my friend, for responding as always, Sue

jetz

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Kal, Thanks for your

Hi Kal, Thanks for your response. You know, until you pointed that out..."to send a friend a sunrise," I didn't really see that. I mean, I wrote it, but, I wrote of thoughts, and feelings....I did not see the beauty that you pointed out to me. I thank you for that. I often doubt my abilities to connect with others, poetically. You brought me hope. Sue

yenti

16 years 5 months ago

Sue

As you sit on the sand and think of others they are there to share your sunrise, as you feel the warmth that lingers from amother soul there in the sand you are not alone, the sunrises as it will for others, and their thoughts turn to other things then you are part of this great universe, Thank you for your bottom print on the sand on another distant shore as the sun rises again, Yours Ian.T

magics02

16 years 5 months ago

words of wisdom

Yenti I just love your response to this poem and of course the sunrise and sunset I love also. Great wisdom. magics02

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Sue

I loved this poem ... only have one gripe ... I aint no lady lol but the ass reference put me off what about plant my feet or plant myself ... I felt it detracted from the poem ... but I cant see anyone else has mentioned it, so it maybe just me it is the early hours of my morning lol really great write though sue beautifully done love and hugs Jayne