The Writer

           The Writer
   Quietly she sat there wondering
   Thinking how her life had changed
   Knowing always the world is turning
   So nothing stays the same

   As he sat there writing, she watched him
   Saw his face, so in thought
   She so wondered what he was thinking
   The depths of him she sought

   Slowly he started typing
   Then she saw his excitement grow
   His fingers flowed 'cross the keyboard
   A sight she'd never known

   His body contained the spirit
   This spirit, she saw it bloom
   She saw his soul flow outward
   Saw him blossom in the room

   All his thoughts, came through his fingers
   All his love came out in words
   Darkest thoughts and deepest secrets
   His true feelings contained in verse

   This is it, she sat there thinking
   This is why she loves him so
   All this passion deep inside him
   As he types, she sees it flow

   She too, knows of this passion
   Of the feeling from within
   Wanting always and so needing
   To write of love, and life and sin

   In her chest, her heart is racing
   In her eyes, she feels the tears
   At long last things come together
   Her soul mate, after all these years.

— jetz, Aug 28, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: South eastern Connecticut, USA

Critiques

Hooded Stranger

16 years 9 months ago

Jetz

This is a great piece of writing...does he exist?...I hope he does...with your talent and his, think of the poetry you can create. To communicate to your love via poetry would be a wonderful experience. I hope he writes you a response in poetic form. You write with such simplicity, a story in poem...you should be proud of this piece. Definitely an Awesome rating. regards, HS

jetz

16 years 9 months ago

H.S. Thanks for the read,

H.S. Thanks for the read, my friend. He most certainly does exist. You will now have a chance to read some of his writing as he has finally joined NEO. Check general poetry, he posted his first there. Vampyre V. Once again, thanks Dan for your warm comments. Each word is greatly appreciated. Sue

blistered-pen

16 years 9 months ago

I love it.

I don't really think the first stanza fits with everything else. Only because the rest of the poem is her watching him. But that's just me. Great poem. :)

jetz

16 years 9 months ago

Thanks for the read BP. I

Thanks for the read BP. I can see the point you made about the 1st stanza, although, to me, it was a lead in for the rest. "She" was thinking of her life now that "he" has become such a large part of it. I will think on some changes that might make the transition smoother. Thanks for the comments. Sue

mantiscepter

16 years 9 months ago

He writes

visual,got caught in the flow, warm and heart felt, Nicely written. Mantiscepter

jetz

16 years 9 months ago

Thank you Mantiscepter, for

Thank you Mantiscepter, for your kind response. Glad you enjoyed the read and I appreciate you taking the time to let me know. Much appreciated. Sue

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Awesome,

You can write girl, I can see her standing by her man, This is such a story of passion in more ways than one, and you portrayed it brilliantly. Lyz.x.

yenti

16 years 9 months ago

Jetz

This piece shows that two people can be one at a distance, you are watching a spirit flow and breathe with a life that is part of you. This is beautiful and filled with the joining just by watching, Yours Ian.T

jetz

16 years 9 months ago

Hi Lyz, Thank you for such

Hi Lyz, Thank you for such a nice comment. Don't you find it easy to write a nice piece when you are so inspired by another? I know YOU do...I've read your post. This is one of my own personal favorites as well, because of the subject. "He" is often my muse. Thanks for taking the time to read and respond. It's greatly appreciated. Sue

jetz

16 years 9 months ago

Hi Yenti, I thank you for

Hi Yenti, I thank you for taking the time to read and respond to this piece. Distance is something the heart cannot measure or understand. For we writers, that's a very good thing ! Thanks again for your comment. Sue