big-Alzer

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The Blacksmith

Posted Jul 26, 2011 · 38 lines · 3 critiques

He rises early as cockerel yields,
His rallying cry in blazing sky ,
over dewy fields.

And all of life is stirring,
and chatter with their song,
as honey bee in shrubbery,
is busy all day long.

A cup of water a morsel of bread,
while foul scurry, who not been fed,
in frenzied hurry, as their led.

He takes some wood to make a fire,
to fashion the instrument of His desire,
and stokes the embers still with heat,
and pumps the bellows with his feet.

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And blackened coal now turns white,
His face now brightened by the light,
He wipes his eyes to clear his sight,
at last the fire is just right.

From smelting pot he pours the ore,
shooting sparks fall to floor,
into the mold it quickly sets,
from furrowed brow fall beads of sweat.

Then to fire He turns His gaze,
bellows the air and brings to blaze,
He grasps a hammer in his hand,
as the fire He quickly fans.

And blow by blow with might of arm,
falls the hammer gripped in palm,
and the fashioned iron of his intent,
is slowly shaped, teased, and bent.

With every blow His mark is sealed
the image of Himself revealed,
it bares His name the finished brand,
brought forth by His loving hand.

The Smithy's craft is nearly done,
as twilight falls at setting sun,
as far as the east is from the west,
of all of His work this is the best.

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August 2011
16 Tue

Critiqued
"Echoes" by @violet
"Hi Violet what a lovely piece speaks of heart issues, and lost loves of what might of been. Its always brave to share things of the heart, as sometimes there is a cost involved. I love the hidden deepness of it. Well do…"
July 2011
26 Tue

Received a critique
on The Blacksmith from @scribbler
"I don't think I've seen you on site before. Welcome, and nice description of an art which is being revived by many..........stan"
26 Tue

Posted a poem
The Blacksmith
"He rises early as cockerel yields,"
Open thread 38 lines
May 2011
25 Wed

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.
May 2010
23 Sun

Received a critique
on Restoration from @RobeccaJane Lee-Murchison
"Elf was totally right about you, this is amazing. i wish i had your talent, i mean i do sometimes, or at least i think so, it comes in spirts you know, but to possess such talent would be a true gift. cherish it."
January 2010
30 Sat

Received a critique
on Restoration from @Geezer
"Yes, it is a good thing to have a teachable spirit. And yes, that is my bike. It is a 1985 Honda Interceptor 500 v-four. It is a pretty rare bike these days and I have had lots of trouble finding parts. My friend and I…"
30 Sat

Received a critique
on Restoration from @Geezer
"I am in total agreement with the analysis of the father subject. As to the rest, I will not speak. So many of our children, for one reason or another do not know their fathers. You have been away for sometime and may no…"
30 Sat

Received a critique
on Restoration from @Kailashana
"Me too. Incarceration is such an issue for me. It's so lopsided, the scales of justice are never quite balanced. And we really don't know how to *rehabilitate*... we need to teach our children by example--the only way c…"
30 Sat

Posted a poem
Restoration
"89% of men incarcerated in the us have never known,"
Open thread 42 lines
26 Tue

Critiqued
"There" by @Shadowteller
"hey Chris this is short and sweet a good play with words. it gets the thumbs up."
May 2009
27 Wed

Received a critique
on Mr Speaker from @Geezer
"Al,you have got this nailed! Of course there are crooked poloticians everywhere,but you seem to gotten the attitude of them[when they are caught]exactly right! I am assuming that Mr. Speaker is like an attorney of some…"
26 Tue

Critiqued
"i love my grampa" by @Geezer
"Hi Gee, just wanted to say what a lovely poem. It reflects the precious times we share together as families, and the bonds we form with the next generation. Nice work indeed. Kind Regards Al."
25 Mon

Posted a poem
Mr Speaker
"Mr Speaker try,"
Open thread 41 lines
17 Sun

Critiqued
"No One Heard" by @Baz
"Hi Baz good poem on a similar vein to the one i wrote. Yes its strange how being alone can effect our emotions. Where as choosing to be alone effects us in a lesser manner. Anyway good poem. kind regards Al."
16 Sat

Received a critique
on Solitude or Loneliness from @Baz
"I feel the words that you wrote as I too have had experience of solitude, (choice), and loneliness, (not by choice). I do not like the style where capitalisation is not used as your i instead of I. I too have a poem on…"
16 Sat

Posted a poem
Solitude or Loneliness
"Ah solitude the choice to be alone,"
Open thread 35 lines
16 Sat

Received a critique
on Roisin Dubh (black rose) from @Geezer
"Rett and I.D. have already taken care of the grammatical stuff,so I am free to say that this is one of your better poems,without going into that. I can just say that I really liked this one. You have given your hero gre…"
15 Fri

Posted a poem
Roisin Dubh (black rose)
"Born of emerald's fire,"
Open thread 26 lines
15 Fri

Highest posting month
May 2009 — 5 poems
11 Mon

Critiqued
"Butterfly In The Antique Mirror (For Mom) " by @Morgana Tragic Proprietress
"Katie this is such a beautiful piece. I can imagine you all dressed up in different clothes standing in front of the mirror. From all dressed up in pink and frilly ribbons, to your hockey shirt, and ripped jeans. And th…"
03 Sun

Posted a poem
Ireland's pain, America's call
"All is death no more hope to be found,"
Open thread 45 lines
01 Fri

Posted a poem
Hope of a new day
"I appear to have lost my swing."
Open thread 29 lines
April 2009
24 Fri

Posted a poem
Take the train to Tipperary
"Take the train to Tipperary,"
Open thread 58 lines
19 Sun

Critiqued
"The Descent into Darkness" by @lizzzz84
"well done nice work. It has a good flow to it, and its has some raw emotion with a comfortable end. I like the blanket of peace, good to pull over your head and shut out the world. ps welcome to neopoet regards Big Alze…"
March 2009
25 Wed

Critiqued
"Why does It Hurt" by @yenti
"A beautiful work full of emotions. The eternal question "why" remains unanswered for so many of us when we see suffering and pain. There is a lot of compassion and understanding of the walk of life which can be so short…"
15 Sun

Critiqued
""taxi-man"" by @Geezer
"i love the rhyme on this one, and a graphic picture of a night as a taxi driver. very vivid like watching a film. Almost like sitting in the back seat being driven around hearing the sound, and the smells. Good stuff Ge…"
08 Sun

Posted a poem
Does patience pay?
"Does patience pay a dividend,"
Open thread 49 lines
February 2009
28 Sat

Posted a poem
a pair of shoes
" I got a pair of shoes to fit you,"
Open thread 34 lines
January 2009
31 Sat

Posted a poem
i had a dream
"I had a dream,"
Open thread 51 lines
27 Tue

Posted a poem
i wonder
"I wonder why they call it rodeo,"
Open thread 4 lines
25 Sun

First critique offered
on "Ancient Fire " by @Blue_Halcyon
01 Thu

First publication
land of my father ( Ireland )

About Me

About me

My greatest influence was Phil Lynott musician and front man of Thin Lizzy. He also used to hang around with poets, and had several books of poetry published. He was an amazing lyricist.
To be honest i have not read much of the Greats. I have listened to some on You Tube, but i do like lyrics
I don't tend think of myself as a "poet" just someone who can throw some words together, that sometimes rhyme. I guess i tend to see my poems before i write them. Then the Prophetic writings in the Bible have also been a big influence also. The book of Psalms, the book of Isaiah. the wisdom chapters are rich in the diversity of all human emotion.
Then there's my Irish heritage born of Irish parents, and going to school there also contributes to who i am and the influences that have shaped my life.

Location: RUGBY UK, GBR

Favorite Poets

Phil Lynott

Gary moore

some Yeats

Wordsworth

C.S.Lewis

and Scripture from the Bible

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15 years of membership

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"Echoes" by @violet

on The Blacksmith from @scribbler

Membership begins

on Restoration from @RobeccaJane Lee-Murchison

on Restoration from @Geezer

on Restoration from @Geezer

on Restoration from @Kailashana

"There" by @Shadowteller

on Mr Speaker from @Geezer

"i love my grampa" by @Geezer

"No One Heard" by @Baz

on Solitude or Loneliness from @Baz

on Roisin Dubh (black rose) from @Geezer

May 2009 — 5 poems

"Butterfly In The Antique Mirror (For Mom) " by @Morgana Tragic Proprietress

"The Descent into Darkness" by @lizzzz84

"Why does It Hurt" by @yenti

""taxi-man"" by @Geezer

on "Ancient Fire " by @Blue_Halcyon

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