sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

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CRAVING LOVE

Posted Jul 1, 2010 · 15 lines · 12 critiques

Love deprived unsensitized.

Thoughts of demise
loving a surprise
remembering the disguise.

Forgetting the sunrise
wishing to compromise.

Once upon a time
knowing the reason why
killing to stay alive.

Looking to flowers
having no power.

The gate never to open
hell just offered a token
craving love is simply unspoken.

sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk’s timeline

September 2023
07 Thu

Anniversary
15 years of membership
September 2018
07 Fri

Anniversary
10 years of membership
September 2013
07 Sat

Anniversary
5 years of membership
May 2012
16 Wed

Critiqued
"The Fruit Stand Yard" by @Benjamin1987
"My take on this poem is simple to explain. It was well written and placed a smile to my gray. Keep up the good work. Your friend Sakkk."
February 2011
26 Sat

New follower
@Hooded Stranger
July 2010
18 Sun

Received a critique
on CRAVING LOVE from @Electric Blue
"Sakkkkkk Are you a White Knight? I give my Dark Knight all I can give and more beyond but in the shadows he feels safe Electric Blue"
17 Sat

Critiqued
"Unhealthy Beliefs" by @Breakinglogic
"BreakingLogic: Just my mind and what I think. Enjoyed the poem you placed. And what the heck I will read between the lines of words placed. The poem is a fine read yet it does bother me. The ending of truth as to your m…"
17 Sat

Critiqued
"IT’S SUCH A BEAUTIFUL DAY" by @Professor Purple
"Professor Purple: I think as I live life unto itself my friend. To the truth I hate fluff poetry. Understanding the poems I place quill to parchment are harsh to many minds. I will never write fluff yet I find this piec…"
14 Wed

Received a critique
on CRAVING LOVE from @Seren
"I am late late late for a this very important date ... but I got here I just found it ... bravo my friend I loved it ... the 'ise' rhymes bothered me a little like Jess but with a reread they dont sound so Jarring I wil…"
13 Tue

Received a critique
on FLOWER FROZEN from @Electric Blue
"Sakkkkkkkkkk You intrigue me so. The seeda of the flower are we To fall where the shifting winds blowa Open eyes so closed do not see the mind too wander be So easy to be but hard to comply for most I fear Standing alon…"
13 Tue

Received a critique
on CRAVING LOVE from @Electric Blue
"Sakkkk My friend Fear not my friend my tears mostly of joy but then dispair when having to leave my dark knight. His family mean the most to him so worry not there. But my heart gets tattered and splattered and the piec…"
09 Fri

Received a critique
on SIMPLISTIC THOUGHT from @Electric Blue
"Sakkkkkkkkk From what I observe you a soldier be If so you see all the tragic scenes you see. So from thought to thought and in a blink of an eye you are thrown from the zone. So what is reality. The gray I seem to be i…"
09 Fri

Received a critique
on CRAVING LOVE from @Electric Blue
"Sakkkk Steven You title drew me in. All I do is Crave Love but only from my dark Knight his heart is fickle as to say but it is where I reside and do lay silently So at this time deprived of love sink to the depths of d…"
09 Fri

Received a critique
on CRAVING LOVE from @weirdelf
"the rest is presented with elegant simplicity although I am not quite comfortable with the long run of -ise rhymes, forgive the pun but they seem to trivialise your content. Cheers, Jess, Reprehensibly irrepressible,"
08 Thu

Received a critique
on CRAVING LOVE from @mark
"The silent craving , the hunger..and gentle suggestions of sound in this quiet poem that hits the spot is all good.. Thanks, Mark"
07 Wed

Critiqued
"Shooting time " by @Seren
"Seren. My lady I wish to explain. I Steven was born in Alaska the year of sixty two. A military brat and yes family there from the eighteen hundreds. I laugh as I myself am just a mechanic. Two of my uncle's were airmin…"
03 Sat

Critiqued
"your chance" by @Sinthya
"Sinthia, I must say the poem is not of my time I would spend. And in saying that I will also offer your gray a shake. As it was worth the time spent. I laugh at myself from time to time as a redneck lost in his own demi…"
03 Sat

Critiqued
"Shooting time " by @Seren
"Seren, Out of your box my fine lady. As you know I write of war and well things that most wish to never dwell upon. I write from my mind places I have seen and of life. I am different than the majority of poets and tend…"
02 Fri

Critiqued
"IT’S SUCH A BEAUTIFUL DAY" by @Professor Purple
"Professer Purple, I like the placment of quill you held the read well. I think as to the read it is from your mind your gray as I would say. Well done my friend as it kept from the start to the finish and after that to…"
01 Thu

Posted a poem
CRAVING LOVE
"Love deprived unsensitized."
Open thread 15 lines
June 2010
24 Thu

Critiqued
"USEABLE TIME" by @W.C.Wampler
"W.C.Wampler. Yesterday was lost in a glance. Today will sing and dance. Remember to reflect. love and regrett. Pride is of the truth spent. Hell is always ben't. Love your life my friend of words spent. Remember and nev…"
06 Sun

Posted a poem
SQUARE BOX
"Please step in."
Open thread 10 lines
May 2010
03 Mon

Posted a poem
MAGIC
"Awe the sun.  Thanking God I will watch her run.  Placing my knees to ground yes without a sound.  my eyes now wide open.  Asking myself is it true what I see.  Magic is that you or is my mind playing tricks on me.  Wondering two things at the same time.  Why did you come? And what would you ask of me.  Placed without the loose of time only yes it is I and I came to be at your side.  The statment was only this.  You pack heavy are you looking for blood?  I reply as to say yes I go to the killing field alone come the morrow of the day next.  I need my tools of death.  Asking do you not have your soul or did by chance you were to sell your mind to a devil?  A smile I offer and by chance a misunderstood comment.  My weapons my lady bring me comfort.  So no I will not leave them to rust.  Walking to the open door.  Telling only myself excuse me as my hands are full and my pack be it heavy.  Don't go I hear to my minds eye.  Don't follow me as I send a tear to my lips.  After a five mile hike I turn back .  When home is to be I find the room empty.  I wonder was Magic actually here or just my mind playing tricks to my gray.  Placing my weapons to thier rightfull place asking myself why.  When in the corner of my mind Magic comes alive.  Yelling and crying I ask myself why did you come as now I hold no need to bleed.  I lay myself to slumber and with a message I send a thanks to Magic for saving me.  With a fine day to offer and a Gods speed to the next. "
Open thread 1 lines
November 2009
26 Thu

Most-discussed work
FLOWER FROZEN

29 critiques to date.
26 Thu

Posted a poem
FLOWER FROZEN
"A flower in need"
Open thread 20 lines
September 2009
13 Sun

Posted a poem
FORSAKEN
"A part of you am I not."
Open thread 19 lines
07 Mon

Anniversary
One year of membership
August 2009
07 Fri

Posted a poem
( FINE DAY TO DIE )
"                                                                                  A picture in my mind."
Open thread 19 lines
July 2009
04 Sat

Posted a poem
SIMPLISTIC THOUGHT
"A rat in a maze turning corners."
Open thread 17 lines
June 2009
18 Thu

Posted a poem
NEVER FORGET REGRET
"Asking how are you"
Open thread 31 lines
May 2009
17 Sun

Posted a poem
CRACKER
"                                                                                               Green colored cans."
Open thread 18 lines
07 Thu

Posted a poem
Eyes Of Black
"                                                                                              A killing machine"
Open thread 26 lines
April 2009
08 Wed

Posted a poem
MARINE
"                                                                                                 I hold the ground in front of me,"
Open thread 14 lines
06 Mon

Posted a poem
LISTEN
"                                                                                                     Point I draw on this fine day."
Open thread 17 lines
November 2008
29 Sat

First publication
SOLACE OF SOUL
September 2008
08 Mon

First critique offered
on "The Desolate Heart" by @Mohammad Yamin Iraqi
07 Sun

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 83 days later.

15 years of membership

10 years of membership

5 years of membership

"The Fruit Stand Yard" by @Benjamin1987

on CRAVING LOVE from @Electric Blue

"Unhealthy Beliefs" by @Breakinglogic

"IT’S SUCH A BEAUTIFUL DAY" by @Professor Purple

on CRAVING LOVE from @Seren

on FLOWER FROZEN from @Electric Blue

on CRAVING LOVE from @Electric Blue

on SIMPLISTIC THOUGHT from @Electric Blue

on CRAVING LOVE from @Electric Blue

on CRAVING LOVE from @weirdelf

on CRAVING LOVE from @mark

"Shooting time " by @Seren

"your chance" by @Sinthya

"Shooting time " by @Seren

"IT’S SUCH A BEAUTIFUL DAY" by @Professor Purple

"USEABLE TIME" by @W.C.Wampler

One year of membership

on "The Desolate Heart" by @Mohammad Yamin Iraqi

Membership begins

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