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Unhealthy Beliefs

 
I have things in my head that don't belong
Don't get me wrong, were all born to sin
Now if you would just co-sign, my little angel,
We could figure this out

I can see in colors you can't imagine
I listen to things that don't make sounds
I speak in tongues that are used for stabbing
And I hold many things that have no bounds
Be careful what you wish for because I'm compliant
So easily used, you'll become reliant
A harmless abuse
But I'll leave you dying

Have you ever wondered about my ideas?
Housed in my head, carved with smile
They'll make you insane,
Bricks carved in my membrane
Straw thoughts loosed from the back of my dome
To blow you away
My influence is made of sticks like dynamite,
They cut at the tip like diamonds might
Get it right, ground yourself and stay in the fight. 

Have you ever seen a miracle?
Lower your standards and I swear you will
And I beleive there's someone above
Killing his people who beg for love
Drugging our minds with words read man,
Swearing divine salvations with a bloody hand
Commanding us to hold truths without ground
It's no wonder religion's so structurally sound

Now if we take a look down
Sesame Street
Taking a look down at our feet
An imprint, a mold we tried to fill
Walking in shoes
Preconformed to a will
Scaled at a skew
And paved to a pew
Masterly misleading
And artfully stealing
Healthy minds
And turning them ill
— Breakinglogic, Jun 22, 2010

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zombie

15 years 11 months ago

hey

well you got my vote! You are an amazing talented poet! good worK!
Professor Purple

Professor Purple

15 years 11 months ago

Hi! Controversy huh? I

Hi! Controversy huh? I guess, not a problem with me but yeah some won't appreciate. In fact I like it. A lot. "devine" should be spelled "divine", and I'm a bit uneasy about the cap on "My influence". It fits the theme of the poem perfectly, I just hope it's not a habit with you. Also, "It’s no wonder religions so structurally sound"- "are"? Antoine
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 11 months ago

Hmm seems you found some

Hmm seems you found some typos for me :) I should have caught those, thanks! "my influence..." should start a new line. "It's no wonder religions..," should be "It's no wonder religion's.." non plural. I'll make the corrections now. I'm glad you like the write Antoine, thanks again :) peace and cheers, logic
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billy bilo

15 years 11 months ago

Have you ever seen a miracle?

I think that would make a better title, I also think thats a damn fine line, lower your standards and I think you will. Didnt cotton on it was about the botherers until that verse began, not contraversal at all for me, and only the most troubled minds would think so, I live in the middle though, few bother with that kind of thing here.
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 11 months ago

I agree my current title is

I agree my current title is weak, still trying to think of a good one, thanks for your suggestion :) I'm happy you liked the line, it was an important point in my write. Thanks nodform :) peace and cheers, logic
Beauregard

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

I speak in tongues that are used for stabbing

love that line. I'll come back (probably tomorrow) and offer you that really constructive critique you're looking for, if you want me to! Kelsey "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 11 months ago

Hey Kelsey, thanks for

Hey Kelsey, thanks for stopping by. I would very much appreciate if you found time for a critique. Feel free to be brutally honest, thanks :D peace and cheers, logic
xena465

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

Brilliant Logic

I love where this write is coming from and what it represents, very powerful and great. There are a few spelling errs and tweaks needed to make this just perfect…Fabulous. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 11 months ago

Thank you Xena, I’m

Thank you Xena, I'm thrilled to know you liked the theme. Haven't caused any sad faces yet :) fixing those typos now, thanks for nice comment :) peace and cheers, logic
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scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

great work about a mind

great work about a mind troubled by expectations imposed upon it.Or I might have missed intent entirely. really liked last verse........scribbler
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 11 months ago

Hello scribbler, thanks for

Hello scribbler, thanks for the read :) it is actually an anti-religion poem. I am worried about the last stanza being too direct, almost insulting; I am very pleased you liked peace and cheers, logic
loved

loved

15 years 11 months ago

i bask in

...in the shadow of ur talent last time we wrote simultaneously.... albeit unknowingly TORMENT STUFF U GOT THE SPOT LIGHT i was EVOLUTIONISED now it seems ANGELISING is our common theme.... friend my blog u may read. i have u as a friend ,,,, buddy when will u , if at all add me>>>
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 11 months ago

Hey loved, you’re much too

Hey loved, you're much too bright to be in my shadow. I did not know my work was ever spotlighted, I missed it I guess. I haven't been too active lately, will for sure check out your blog :) as far as my buddylist, lovely you have been on it since day one we exchanged words :) thanks for reading :) peace and cheers, logic
B

BrightEyed

15 years 11 months ago

i love reading your work

u have such talent :) cant wait to read more, great job :) ur friend, bright eyed
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Logic

great poem its all be said before me ... so brava love and hugs JayCee (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)
Beauregard

Beauregard

15 years 11 months ago

Jayne,

unless Logic is secretly a woman, I think you mean "bravo." LOL XD Kelsey "In criticism I will be bold, and as sternly, absolutely just with friend and foe. From this purpose nothing shall turn me." -Edgar Allan Poe "If technique is of no interest to a writer, I doubt that the writer is an artist." -Marianne Moore
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

pmsl typo Kels lol wooppps

pmsl typo Kels lol wooppps sorry logic ... love and hugs JayCee (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)
Seren

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Bravvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvoooooooo

Bravvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvvoooooooooooo ~! lol smiles love JayCee (“In time we hate that which we often fear.” William Shakespeare quote)
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 11 months ago

Lol I’ll take a brava or

Lol I'll take a brava or bravo, I am simply.... Delighted by the compliment either way :D Thanks for the read :) peace and cheers, logic
M

magics02

15 years 10 months ago

My Logic

Where have you been since this last write of yours? Miss you around here and I see your new pic very deep thinking you got going on and missing that smile of yours for sure. Hope all is well by you guy. Write again soon. This piece I see you were deep in thoughts it portrayed to me just that. I see one word believe as a misspelled and I hope you Believe when I tell you I miss you guy!! Love at ya hugs xoxox Mona Momma
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 10 months ago

Just a lot of things in my

Just a lot of things in my mind, that's all. Just had another death in the family. Also have been doing a lot of good ol training of course. Too many things to think about, I will be back on soon. I've made some promises to take an eye to some writes, I intend to catch up when I can focus. Thanks for the read, my magicmum peace and cheers, logic
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magics02

15 years 10 months ago

Sorry to hear that Logic

I send to you my condolences at this time my dear friend. You take care of you too and know I am always here for you if you like to pm me to talk or I will see you when you return. Always know I have a place for you in my heart and prayers go out to you this day and always Love you my Neopoet Son Magics Mom xxxoxoxo
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sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

15 years 10 months ago

LIFE

BreakingLogic: Just my mind and what I think. Enjoyed the poem you placed. And what the heck I will read between the lines of words placed. The poem is a fine read yet it does bother me. The ending of truth as to your mind at work is much like myself. Never to give up never to say ok. Well done my friend. As I sit at this machine a brother you will be forever and a day. Sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk
Breakinglogic

Breakinglogic

15 years 10 months ago

Sakkk, as always your words

Sakkk, as always your words placed are much welcome. Thanks for the read and your thoughts. I have a lot on my mind currently, I'll be away for a short while longer. Maybe we can go fishing again sometime. Peace and cheers, logic