IT’S SUCH A BEAUTIFUL DAY

what a joyful,light work.Some days ARE so good they make one want to shout......scribbler

I would like to come back to re-read it tomorrow with a freshhead as I am so tired now. But I like what I read here just something tripping me up. Remind me to return okay? Love at ya guy Mona

Professer Purple, I like the placment of quill you held the read well. I think as to the read it is from your mind your gray as I would say. Well done my friend as it kept from the start to the finish and after that to think.

IN THE DDDO COMPLEX OR THE FAIR VIEW MALL OR THE FUTURE SHOP ANY WHERE ELSE IN MONTREAL THE LAKE THE DOWN TOWN JUST SAY WHERE CASSINO TOO AND I SHALL GOD WILLING BE THERE STANDING IN FRONT OF YOU BUT YOU WILL CONTINUE TO DECLARE NO I DON'T KNOW YOU I WILL BE IN RED AND U IN BLUE . WHERE IN MONTREAL FRIENDLY POET ARE YOU ARE YOU ARE UUUUUUUUUUUU

it's amazing how one day we wake up and know we're over it, whatever 'it' is at the particular time and i can remember that transient feeling of bliss and joy in life..... and of forgiving the other hope you're having a beautiful day lol judy xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

I have to agree with Judy on this poem My favorite lines: It was so hard to let go I tried and tried and tried yet no I guess I just didn’t know how Well I’m feeling much better now Always, Cat

I dont know if I have read it wrong but ... it makes me think, yesterday was a bad day,and how I felt then well all thats changed, I've woken up today and yesterday is but a memory and we can only but live for this, this beautiful day With the passing of the seasons I might understand your reasons We could share epicurean pleasures Maybe you’ll choose to give me some answers my favourite stanza nice work PP love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

I need to talk at ya guy, been a hectic weekend, Catch up with me in chat tonight if you can Love at ya guy Mona

Think you have a nice poem with a lovely thought behind it. It is hard to wish someone well when love has ended between two people. Now…for the hard part. When we are learning, as poets, our creations are very dear and near to our hearts. It is not always easy to hear critics. I think it is really good for us to practice new and different rhyming patterns and styles, it helps us expand our talents. This one is very repetitious and I believe, if you are going to start it out in specific repetition, you should carry that pattern throughout the entire poem (aside from the 2 stand alone lines. I kind of liked those..unique thoughts aside from the body, in away) When we get down to the 3rd stanza & 5th stanza, your rhyme goes off. I know seasons can be difficult to rhyme with an appropriate word of pleasures…. So, you need to pick other words that fill the other lines or move the non-rhyming Line around till you find a way to get that rhyme! Since you have this very repetitive rhyme, some of the repetition in your lines is overwhelming. I believe theres places you can omit some of that.. like the I told you you mad me mad.. I told you I was mad. I’m adding some examples…just suggestions 1st stanza… ‘I said you made me sad I said that you’d been bad I told you I was mad These words were all I had’ and for stanza 5… ‘With the seasons passing fluctuations I might understand your motivations We could share epicurean conversations Perhaps you’ll give some explanations’ You can still have the same meaning..but find something that continues your pattern. I have a few more ideas if you are interested, p.m. me I would be happy to help. Always Sincere, Tonya

Professor Purple: I think as I live life unto itself my friend. To the truth I hate fluff poetry. Understanding the poems I place quill to parchment are harsh to many minds. I will never write fluff yet I find this piece of quill placed to parchment is well done. Five thousand stars and a brake to a wave of the lady the sea I say. Good luck and Gods speed to the next. Sakkkkkkkkkkkkkkk.