LiquidSunshine

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Poetry for the Damned.

Posted Sep 10, 2009 · 34 lines · 6 critiques

I have fallen, my wings are tattered.
With the hand of wrath, he sparks a match, which sets my wings alight.
Confusion takes hold, my soul has been charred, yet i know i'll leap again.
The light is what i seek
Darkness is what i find.
Entrapped in this doom, that i know as my life.
Still i search.
Still i pray.
Why?
There's a voice i hear who sothes my sorrow, and mends my wounds.
She speaks of freedom, she speaks of love.
She whispers at night, and tells me to fly.
This is why i search.
This is why i pray.

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My eyes are sealed shut, for sound alone scares me enough.
If i saw what i heard, she'd leave.
My prayers would stop,
I'd cease to search.
For she gives me hope of a better tomorrow.
Yet tomorrow never comes. Today is all i know.
In this place time is evasive.
In this place there is no dawn.
NIght is all we have, though the stars are not welcome here.
They are the holes through which i see the light.
Holes for the damned to peer into heaven.
They are what i reach for,
Through the stars is where i lay.
She tells me this hell is my own.
That it is i who lights the match.
She says if i open my eyes, the flames are not real,
and the screams cannot be heard.
But my eyes are sealed shut, and i refuse to see.
Still i search.
Still i pray.

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First poem published 1 days later.
June 2010
27 Sun

Received a critique
on Fallen angel from @TaylorMishel
"Wow that was very powerful and sad. I loved it though."
27 Sun

Received a critique
on A Sin Called Love from @TaylorMishel
"Talia i love this one. My favorite part is... Love doesn’t hurt, love doesn’t scream. Love won’t collapse, love lets you dream. I just really like this :) good job"
December 2009
20 Sun

Received a critique
on Poetry for the Damned. from @weirdelf
"Profoundly expressed and excellent imagery but I've got a nagging feeling you could work it a bit, well a lot. I think, maybe, if you looked at it hard, did a bit of trimming and checked for scansion, meter the piece co…"
17 Thu

Received a critique
on Breathe. from @Aireal Steed
"wow I really love this poem. I have never felt myself right there in the writing, like it was really happening in reality. Your really good at describing things. Thanks for the great start to a new day! P.S your other p…"
September 2009
10 Thu

Received a critique
on Free Falling from @Hooded Stranger
"I saw from your profile you have aspirations of song writing...so with that in mind I played with this poem to see if there is a song that can be created from it: Guide me to the light Save me from myself This hollow fe…"
10 Thu

Received a critique
on Poetry for the Damned. from @Hooded Stranger
"I was totally absorbed in this...been there, got the t-shirt and the scars. I liked the way you dropped this line in: In this place time is evasive. In this place there is no dawn That is so true of one stuck at the bot…"
10 Thu

Received a critique
on Poetry for the Damned. from @Orphani
"in depth introspective of the human spirit. clear ,forthright, imaginative, with nice touches of metaphor. i'm all eyes(not that your photo had anything to do with it).......o"
10 Thu

Posted a poem
Poetry for the Damned.
"I have fallen, my wings are tattered."
Open thread 34 lines
07 Mon

Received a critique
on Breathe. from @Hooded Stranger
"I like this piece very much. I think it is the lack of attention to making the lines similar in length...I prefer a raw piece of writing that follows only the rules of the writer. As for the 'bridge' sections between th…"
02 Wed

Posted a poem
Breathe.
"Breathe In."
Open thread 22 lines
August 2009
20 Thu

Posted a poem
Whore.
"“The only happiness you’ll ever find, is that of the past. No matter how bad things seemed then, it’s a hell of a lot better then the present”"
Open thread 147 lines
20 Thu

Posted a poem
A Sin Called Love
"Back to front, up and down."
Open thread 35 lines
01 Sat

Critiqued
"Jet Set Window" by @Atticus
"I really like this. so simple, yet unbeleivably complex. fantastic. You drew me in from the start, and left me begging for more. looking forward to more of your work. kind regards Talia :)"
01 Sat

Posted a poem
Sweet Tears of Joy
"I feel as though i've earnt the right to these wings."
Open thread 33 lines
01 Sat

Critiqued
"House Not a Home" by @Barbara Writes
"WOW. i think that word sums it up pretty well. Fantastic. I wont go into detail about how this made me feel, for i'd be here for hours. but wow. Kind regards Talia."
01 Sat

Critiqued
"A poem of love" by @weirdelf
"I found this really moving, you took me to the top of that mountain with you when i read this. I know exactly what it feels like to experience.. no 'live' true beauty. and yes that is what it feels like. alomst agonisin…"
01 Sat

Critiqued
"Incoherence" by @Taylor Delaware
"This was really passionate, i can easily relate to all you were saying. The emotion was raw and struck some deep cords with me. loved it. nothing needs to be changed. It was easy to read, the point was blunt. absoloutle…"
01 Sat

Critiqued
"Stolen words" by @Baz
"very sweet and enjoyable. If i were here i'd be very happy to have that written about me :) Kind regards Talia"
01 Sat

Critiqued
"Little Death in Zen" by @Seren
"I really really like this one :) so easy to read and it flows brilliantly. I'm looking forward to more of your work. Kind regards Talia"
01 Sat

Critiqued
"Kaleidoscopic cloak and crown of ambivalence" by @Cloudthings
"This was amazing Anni. Honestly it touched, bewildered and inspired me. Your work is absoloutley enchanting. Your quickly becoming one of my favourite reads. Kind regards Talia. :)"
01 Sat

Critiqued
"My one & only ever cyber fling (written over 2 years ago, before I found Neo, please read as the jest intended)" by @Cloudthings
"i loved it, i was smiling the whole way through. brilliant anni :) Kind regards Talia"
01 Sat

First critique offered
on "My one & only ever cyber fling (written over 2 years ago, before I found Neo, please read as the jest intended)" by @Cloudthings
July 2009
31 Fri

Posted a poem
Fallen angel
"I remember when I met you."
Open thread 73 lines
29 Wed

Posted a poem
Evasive mind
"Stuck."
Open thread 20 lines
28 Tue

Posted a poem
Final Act
"A beauty that exceeds that of all others,"
Open thread 23 lines
27 Mon

Most-discussed work
Free Falling

10 critiques to date.
27 Mon

Posted a poem
Free Falling
"Searching, seeking, losing my grip."
Open thread 11 lines
24 Fri

First publication
Let it grow
24 Fri

Posted a poem
Let it grow
"Let it grow, watch it form, watch your strength, be wary of thorns."
Open thread 25 lines
15 Wed

Highest posting month
July 2009 — 5 poems

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on Fallen angel from @TaylorMishel

on A Sin Called Love from @TaylorMishel

on Poetry for the Damned. from @weirdelf

on Breathe. from @Aireal Steed

on Free Falling from @Hooded Stranger

on Poetry for the Damned. from @Hooded Stranger

on Poetry for the Damned. from @Orphani

on Breathe. from @Hooded Stranger

"Jet Set Window" by @Atticus

"House Not a Home" by @Barbara Writes

"A poem of love" by @weirdelf

"Incoherence" by @Taylor Delaware

"Stolen words" by @Baz

"Little Death in Zen" by @Seren

"Kaleidoscopic cloak and crown of ambivalence" by @Cloudthings

"My one & only ever cyber fling (written over 2 years ago, before I found Neo, please read as the jest intended)" by @Cloudthings

on "My one & only ever cyber fling (written over 2 years ago, before I found Neo, please read as the jest intended)" by @Cloudthings

July 2009 — 5 poems

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