Barbara Writes

Jul 30, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

House Not a Home

House Not a Home

Nothing here is me
my home is in disarray
my life has no meaning
in this house not my home

The will to take charge
putting things in order
is alive and well in me
but has fallen from a cliff

The strength to fight
to make the changes
I've grown weaker everyday
in total submission I've embraced

Free from stress
a world off limit
I take no chances to invite
the bitter taste I've encountered

Opportunities for love
sometimes appear thus
I take a leap into its pool
but love is just an illusion

In my world no one knows
where to find me for a visit
their presence is destructive
in my world far to fragile

in this home I find no peace
in my circle I have no friends
I take a trip from time to time
to a place they call, that's life

my trip is short and enjoyable
I never stay or tarry to long
for fear my heart will be crush
by imperfect will and grace

My house is not my home
My life is not my own
in this house I shall survive
but in my world I will delight

— Barbara Writes, Jul 30, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

Critiques

Darby Cain

16 years 10 months ago

:)

Darby Cain

Barbara Writes

16 years 10 months ago

voting

LiquidSunshine

16 years 10 months ago

WOW. i think that word sums

WOW. i think that word sums it up pretty well. Fantastic. I wont go into detail about how this made me feel, for i'd be here for hours. but wow. Kind regards Talia.

Barbara Writes

16 years 10 months ago

Wow

Glads you like it and thanks for commenting. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Ink Dragon

16 years 10 months ago

Barbara,

a great write. I love the theme and think you have executed it very well here. A couple of suggestions (you know me, stickler for spelling etc. you will find a (?) next to the words I altered): stanza 3: in total submission I’ve embraced (?) stanza 4: the bitter taste I’ve encountered (?) stanza 5: Opportunities (?) for love/ sometimes appear thus stanza 6: there (or their?) presence is destructive/ in my world far too (?) fragile stanza 8: I never stay or tarry (?) too (?) long/ for fear my heart will be crushed (?) My favourite lines here were: Opportunities for love sometimes appear thus I take a leap into its pool but love is just an illusion Yours, ~Nina

Barbara Writes

16 years 10 months ago

Wow

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 10 months ago

Barbara,

what a beautiful reviling piece, just after your loss. well written and clear in its point. This is what came to me, as I read your piece. "To know in what direction I'm going, and still feel at a loss is the life that I have choosen. Happiness comes to me not in what I do but in the outcome that generates to those I love." Thanks for the inspiration! Eddie

Barbara Writes

16 years 10 months ago

Eddie

I like your response. it is a wonderful write. Why not post it. thanks for reading and sharing your comment. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Eduardo Cruz

16 years 10 months ago

Barbara,

I'll take your advice and attempt to expound on the two stanza's. thank you, Eddie

lyz

16 years 9 months ago

Surprised

Great Writing. I read all and I would like to comment on all if I may. I'm going to anyway. Beautiful, all of them. All those feelings, truthful and raw, and I can relate to your words, and I would like to read more. Continue to write, until the world seems bright. Thank u, Lyz.

Barbara Writes

16 years 9 months ago

Lyz

Glad you are reading and commenting on my work. thanks a lot. I hope to read more and more of your work. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Seren

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Barbara

First off I have to apologise I thought I left a comment on this days ago round the time Nina commented I wrote it and all I cannot tell you where it is ? maybe I didnt submit properly was tired not sure , but its a great write I love the raw emotion in this one its a awesome write I will be having a dig through your older poems later lol curious I am ... Love Jayne x x "We did not change as we grew older; we just became more clearly ourselves. Lynn Hall" ...

Barbara Writes

16 years 9 months ago

Lyz

no need to apologize I have done it thought I commented and it wasn't there. glad you like it. thanks for reading again and commenting. ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara

Ink Dragon

16 years 8 months ago

Barbara is not home.

And she is missed. Dear Barbara, may you return soon and may everything turn out well. Yours, ~Nina

Barbara Writes

16 years 8 months ago

Nina

I still check my email and log into the site to see what's going on even though I'm not actively participating. Thanks for the vote and comment. I really appreciate it. (:-) ~~~~~~~~~ Be whoever you are At all times, and Remember that Because of this, people will Always Respect, and Admire you ©2008Leonard Respectfully Yours, Barbara