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Breathe.

Breathe In.

Once his hand held your heart.
Now his fingers flick away the tears.
He tells me things will get better, time will heal all.
What the hell would he know, he's not the one who's about to fall.

Breathe out.

He tells me that our friendship will last,
Though he'll never hold me, we can't forget the past.
HIs eyes tell me, he no longer cares.
And his words justify, all that his eyes bare.

Breathe In.

I know the reason why, the truth is plain to see.
He surely is in love, but his heart no longer beats for me.
I've seen the way he looks at her, it's the same way she looks at him.
I've been a fool to hold back my tears, I'm now full to the brim.

Breathe out.

Don't forget to breathe, never quit the fight.
My eyes follow him, untill he's out of sight.
I fall to the ground, and cup my face in my hands.
My heart has been broken. 

Breathe In. Keep going.
  Don't forget to exhale.  

— LiquidSunshine, Sep 02, 2009

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Ravenshakti

Ravenshakti

16 years 9 months ago

Dear Talia...

I am in love with your poem... A bitter-sweet meditation, of things of the Heart. Sometimes the best we can do, is to remember to Breathe. You are a very graceful Poetess... Gentle regards, Raven.
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LiquidSunshine

16 years 9 months ago

Thank you :)

Thank you very much Raven, I love it when people are able to connect with my work. and its always nice to get good feed back :) thank you again.
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 9 months ago

Talia

I like this piece very much. I think it is the lack of attention to making the lines similar in length...I prefer a raw piece of writing that follows only the rules of the writer. As for the 'bridge' sections between the verses...exquisite. Great job, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
L

LiquidSunshine

16 years 9 months ago

Much appreciated

Thank you very much, no i love getting feed back on my work,i just forgot to click the button :) I tried to make this peice very free, and simple... hence the breathing. In my personal opinion it makes the poem much more personal, and i like to write from the heart and soul. Im very gald you liked it :)
AS

Aireal Steed

16 years 5 months ago

wow I really love this poem.

wow I really love this poem. I have never felt myself right there in the writing, like it was really happening in reality. Your really good at describing things. Thanks for the great start to a new day! P.S your other poems are really good to.