Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Poetry for the Damned.

I have fallen, my wings are tattered.
With the hand of wrath, he sparks a match, which sets my wings alight.
Confusion takes hold, my soul has been charred, yet i know i'll leap again.
The light is what i seek
Darkness is what i find.
Entrapped in this doom, that i know as my life.
Still i search.
Still i pray.
Why?
There's a voice i hear who sothes my sorrow, and mends my wounds.
She speaks of freedom, she speaks of love.
She whispers at night, and tells me to fly.
This is why i search.
This is why i pray.
My eyes are sealed shut, for sound alone scares me enough.
If i saw what i heard, she'd leave.
My prayers would stop,
I'd cease to search.
For she gives me hope of a better tomorrow.
Yet tomorrow never comes. Today is all i know.
In this place time is evasive.
In this place there is no dawn.
NIght is all we have, though the stars are not welcome here.
They are the holes through which i see the light.
Holes for the damned to peer into heaven.
They are what i reach for,
Through the stars is where i lay.
She tells me this hell is my own.
That it is i who lights the match.
She says if i open my eyes, the flames are not real,
and the screams cannot be heard.
But my eyes are sealed shut, and i refuse to see.
Still i search.
Still i pray.




— LiquidSunshine, Sep 10, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

More from this author

Critiques

L

LiquidSunshine

16 years 9 months ago

Thank you

Im really pleased to hear that you understood the meaning behind this poem, i read it to a few friends and they simply thought it was about hell. But no, this is about a girl who has fallen into such a deep depression that she is in her own hell, but a part of her still wants to be happy, so she's searching, without realising that the hell she's in, is of her own creation. :) I'm really glad you enjoyed it. It was difficult to write, but i was pleased with the out come.
O

Orphani

16 years 9 months ago

in depth introspective of

in depth introspective of the human spirit. clear ,forthright, imaginative, with nice touches of metaphor. i'm all eyes(not that your photo had anything to do with it).......o
L

LiquidSunshine

16 years 9 months ago

Much appreciated

Thank you for your feedback. Its always nice to have someone enjoy your work. :) thanks again.
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 9 months ago

Torch

I was totally absorbed in this...been there, got the t-shirt and the scars. I liked the way you dropped this line in: In this place time is evasive. In this place there is no dawn That is so true of one stuck at the bottom of a slippery slope. I really 'felt' this poem. Even the damned can find that light at the end of the tunnel, just hope it isn't the Devil with a torch! Awesome write. regards to new favourite poetess, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
L

LiquidSunshine

16 years 9 months ago

Wow, thankyou, i’m

Wow, thankyou, i'm honestly flattered :) its really, really appreciated. thankyou again for your feedback, im so glad you liked it.
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 5 months ago

Also been there, got the t-shirt and scars

Profoundly expressed and excellent imagery but I've got a nagging feeling you could work it a bit, well a lot. I think, maybe, if you looked at it hard, did a bit of trimming and checked for scansion, meter the piece could flow better, producing a more leading hypnotic affect, which would match the content. Sorry I can't give you specific examples because it would be entirely up to you. I love it as it is, just feel there is some unrealised poetic potential there, Cheers, Jess, reprehensibly irrepressible