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smilecatcher
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The moment the light went out
The moment the light in her eyes went out,
like a snuffed-out candle, her sun lost its glow.
Vacantly staring at a whitewashed wall,
void of graffiti, its substance is gone.
Having to keep busy, busy like bees in a hive,
only to be outdone by frantic ants in a hill.
The heartbreaking cry of a thunderous sky wounded
by a boundless echo of distress.
The power of words is undeniable.
True or false, they're burning a hole in her soul.
Why not think twice about the discharge from your mouth
since the harm is not retrievable.
Consider the child pulling out the wings of a fly,
without a second thought!
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The petals of a flower ripped apart,
one by one, in a mindless game:" she loves me, she loves me not"
Destroying the essence of beauty itself.
Looking for the sun that needs to appear every day.
Yearning to slice through those unyielding dark clouds
to restore her power in spite of the words.
Voiced with venom for a love lost.
A rejection that is not condoned
in a warped world of selfishness.
Time will heal all wounds or so they say.
With every beat of the clock a sliver of renewal
coats the crack in her soul.
And after the Earth has completed thousand circles
around the sun, she will regain her control.
The clout to stir up a fire in her heart so intense that
it will burst under that ferocious fireball of a
Fourth of July independence, where jubilant flags stir in
a wind of satisfaction like a bear who's found her pot of honey.
Needing to embrace that sun completely,
a magnificent upside-down rainbow appears
in the center of her world and at that moment
the light in her eyes will gently ignite.
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03 ThuReceived a critique
on The moment the light went out from @ziggy
"this line I like "Why not think twice about the discharge from your mouth since the harm is not retrievable." I like the strength of though behind this one, I will return for the edit ,,,,,zigs" -
03 ThuReceived a critique
on The moment the light went out from @Kailashana2
"This needs work as you indicated. I know you are up to the task. Think of what you want to say and how to weave separate thoughts together. Which words are needed and which words aren't. You do that & this will be an *a…" -
03 ThuReceived a critique
on The moment the light went out from @Geezer
"to say the least! You have twisted the meaning of some of the words, to fit. And they do! I like this, and the overall theme, and logic seems to be, somone thinking, and becoming more lucid. I'm not sure of how I would…" -
02 WedReceived a critique
on field of souls from @Psyve
"Your words paint a very sharp picture of this idyllic yet sad landscape. Nicely told. I think you have captured the mood and feel well. On a minor note, I found the rhyming scheme in this piece a little forced and distr…" -
02 WedCritiqued
"Seven Moons of Shaldimoor" by @Rett
"I absolutely loved your poem. It is a joyful read, which I love in a poem. smilecatcher" -
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02 WedReceived a critique
on field of souls from @Candlewitch
"A wonderfully vivid write, full of stark imagery! I loved this dark piece. Especially: Each headstone is a chapter in a life, part of a book sustained to survive. The end is sudden or expected, sometimes accepted, alway…" -
02 WedCritiqued
"CHORE " by @scribbler
"Hi scribbler, I loved being guided through your pastures since my life is being lived in the city, smilecatcher" -
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""A thousand dreams of this moment"" by @shirley harrison
"I love the title and enjoyed reading your poem very much. I want one of those..... smilecatcher" -
02 WedCritiqued
"nestle in repose" by @ziggy
"Hi Ziggy, I feel the same way about the night. I do like Kailashana's comments. I feel that they make the poem better. I loved the poem. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work... Dani ( smilecatcher)" -
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"i write naked poems" by @Kailashana2
"hi Kailashana, I love the first line, a great beginning of the poem and the " stormy night" and " Wagner" connection is wonderful. I like the feeling of the poem... smilecatcher" -
02 WedReceived a critique
on field of souls from @mand
"I think you are going to make a wonderful additon to Neo. Excellent flow and imagery. Love Mand xxxxxx" -
01 TueReceived a critique
on field of souls from @scribbler
"I've not read you before. If you are new here, welcome. This write contains the best of rhyming and free verse. A rare thing in my limited experience........................scribbler" -
01 TueReceived a critique
on field of souls from @ziggy
"hi , a well told tale within your words "Damp lawns extent to the edge of the trees, where willows are weeping ill at ease.",,,,,,,,,,,like these lines and also the ending ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,are you new here ? I also liked…" -
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26 MonCritiqued
"Nightdreams" by @Lonnie
"I absolutely loved your poem. Everything about it is truly enjoyable,the subject,the rhythm and your use of language. Keep it coming !!! Dani ( poems by dfr)" -
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"The simple things." by @chrisbyrne
"yes, thanks for changing that line. I like it much better and I enjoy reading it now." - December 2009
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31 ThuFirst critique offered
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November 2009 — 6 poems
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