no outlet

looking for answers to questions not asked thoughts twirling in your head responding to dreads not said no way to relax a wandering mind a victim to motion no place to rest weary feet demons dancing to an endless tune tired visions under the moon searching for a detour in life finding a moment of peace, just a moment letting out a sigh only for content excluding the forever thinking holding still for no reason at all enjoying some time without wondering a fight for the picture perfect rebound that is nowhere to be found

— smilecatcher, Nov 01, 2009

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seabhac

16 years 7 months ago

Good title

This is a good first poem on Neo. Welcome I liked the first line; it pulled me into the poem. I have read the poem a couple of times and I like the language used and the intent of the message was carried right through the poem. I did feel that the break in the two stanzas cut the flow of the lines. Try reading this one out loud and see if that changes anything for you. A little punctuation may also help the reader know where you want them to pause or stop. Just suggestions, this is a good poem and I look forward to reading some more of your work. Seabhac