Layune

Member since October 13, 2009

Member for 16 years, 7 months

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Living; Habitual Existence

Posted Oct 8, 2018 · 21 lines · 1 critiques

There are moments
We seek and believe to be true.
Unlike our present,
They are fleeting; they bare no name.

Desire seeks them.

Questing for conquest
My heart follows,
In-tune with curiosity;
Yet, far removed from sanity.

These moments,
Escape Reality’s reach.

They are fiction, fairy-tales we speak of.

Imagination at its finest deceives me.
I am not ‘us.’

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I am not ‘we.’
I am a bystander.

I am the character,
Active participant in a cameo,
Contrasting wealth and privilege.
I can only be ‘me.’
A subsidized existence.

Layune’s timeline

October 2024
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Anniversary
15 years of membership
October 2019
12 Sat

Anniversary
10 years of membership
March 2019
17 Sun

Received a critique
on Living; Habitual Existence from @Cloudthings
"Great write here, I wouldn't want to change it, it reached me with solid good sensibility, I enjoyed the style, meter, verbiage & content... It's probably one that could provide a variety of interpretations each time it…"
October 2018
08 Mon

Posted a poem
Living; Habitual Existence
"There are moments"
Open thread 21 lines
July 2018
15 Sun

Received a critique
on Youth from @raj
"I liked the language as well as the rhythm and pace of your poem. A poem of this nature could do well with something written in "Last few words" to bring more comprehension....I did not understand the relevance of "spar…"
15 Sun

Posted a poem
Youth
"In the rambling of feathers"
Open thread 27 lines
February 2016
15 Mon

Critiqued
"You Make Me A Good Guy..." by @Geezer
"This is so tenderly sweet. I can only imagine how special this lady must be. So much emotion and a very pleasurable read. Thank you"
December 2015
24 Thu

Received a critique
on The View from @Esker
"I could feel the poem move the descriptors..time pondering and delved maze untamed.... thank U"
22 Tue

Received a critique
on The View from @lovedly
"we must remain silent such a word on ur poetry is kindness"
22 Tue

Received a critique
on Stars to Sea from @lovedly
"now no longer suffocating 'tis the facts of times since my maiden visit fndly"
20 Sun

Received a critique
on The View from @wesley snow
"Your use of random rhyme was evocative. I don't much care for verso libre, but this is rich in metaphor and the language use is superb. Did I mention I liked it? I'd offer advice, but I wouldn't change a thing. You even…"
20 Sun

Posted a poem
The View
"Come along to the view."
Open thread 29 lines
19 Sat

Received a critique
on Stars to Sea from @Esker
"travel poem too me...........I travelled too lovers i ran from lovers...... I moved too court too probation etc Fifties americana poetry was full of the angst and movement I sense this here........and the pain emotional…"
19 Sat

Received a critique
on Stars to Sea from @Geezer
"for sure! I like the title and the sense of what is said, just not sure of what it pertains to."
19 Sat

Posted a poem
Stars to Sea
"In the silence of the night."
Open thread 21 lines
September 2015
27 Sun

Posted a poem
Night's Shrines
"Outside, Night cloaks Time, becoming limitless."
Open thread 35 lines
April 2015
15 Wed

Posted a poem
Rough Sketch
"Line. Shade. Smudge."
Open thread 18 lines
October 2014
12 Sun

Anniversary
5 years of membership
October 2013
20 Sun

Posted a poem
Down the Aisle
"There is an indecipherable complexion in the way that you look at me,"
Open thread 31 lines
February 2013
15 Fri

New follower
@Ian.T
May 2012
01 Tue

Posted a poem
The Intended
"Shadow fever elevates"
Open thread 48 lines
November 2011
05 Sat

Posted a poem
The Feeling
"Could you say"
Open thread 31 lines
September 2011
02 Fri

Posted a poem
Day by Day
"We walked into the darkness"
Open thread 12 lines
May 2011
04 Wed

Posted a poem
Immobile Hesitation
"I wished with grace upon your head"
Open thread 19 lines
January 2011
27 Thu

Posted a poem
Dimming Light
"Jeopardizing frailty"
Open thread 29 lines
October 2010
12 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
February 2010
28 Sun

Critiqued
"Consultation Mode." by @sharon-rose
"I liked the poem. It truly does capture the consultation between patient and doctor and kinda makes you wonder... I loved the lines where the patient speaks so innocently confused "But Doctor,/ Look, I took the pills…"
December 2009
15 Tue

Highest posting month
December 2009 — 5 poems
October 2009
16 Fri

Critiqued
"Music" by @Adrian Kabigting
"I really do love this poem it captures the very essence of what music is that which I find to be so precious and exactly as you stated your language is something truly remarkable which adds on to flow of your poem Kudos…"
16 Fri

First critique offered
on "Music" by @Adrian Kabigting
12 Mon

First publication
Day by Day
12 Mon

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15 years of membership

10 years of membership

on Living; Habitual Existence from @Cloudthings

on Youth from @raj

"You Make Me A Good Guy..." by @Geezer

on The View from @Esker

on The View from @lovedly

on Stars to Sea from @lovedly

on The View from @wesley snow

on Stars to Sea from @Esker

on Stars to Sea from @Geezer

5 years of membership

One year of membership

"Consultation Mode." by @sharon-rose

December 2009 — 5 poems

"Music" by @Adrian Kabigting

on "Music" by @Adrian Kabigting

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