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Suffication

 To wake up
into an unknown place,
startled, I take a deep breath.

Submerged, around words
that float to the surface
of all consciousness,
I spread my arms
wanting to escape.

Yet, the tide rolls over
with a new number,
branding my vague flesh;
and again, I struggle
through the dissolving ink
staining the turning wave.

Resignful I wince away,
with all uncertainty,
bleaching my own name
from the cover of today.
— Layune, Apr 08, 2010

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Region, Country: California, United Sates, USA

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Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

16 years 2 months ago

This is good but,

This is good but it could be better, try writing it again on paper. Then read it out loud, i think sometimes less is better. If you think that there are a few words to come out try it and read it aloud again. Please this is only a suggestion, and if your happy with your poem leave it. Regards Roscoe...