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Day by Day

 We walked into the darkness
Blinding the bestowed gift

People fell before our sides
And yet, cold blood is what it was

Only the wretched hope
Laid within our bloody grasp

The once ideal promise
Captivated our fragile hearts

Nevertheless, all decays
Into that tale told in the past

Life leaks its own hidden wounds
Never knowing if we'll return
— Layune, Oct 12, 2009

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Region, Country: California, United Sates, USA

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seabhac

seabhac

16 years 8 months ago

Welcome Layune

I love the balance of this poem. The title almost acts as a chorus between each verse. This is a deep and passionate poem. My favourite lines were The once ideal promise Captivated our fragile hearts. The last verse gives voice to what many of us consider 'The' question of life and death Seabhac
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Layune

16 years 7 months ago

hi

Thanks It's my first poem posted so it's nice to hear some encouragement I'm glad you liked it