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A Firefly’s Escape

Misguided eyes
Wander through
Forest beats,
Searching
For a note of reassurance
That may indeed
Appease withered wings.

Yet, revisions within,
Claim the wisdom,
Out speak the truth,
And discredit inner beliefs.

 All ,
Leaving no more
Than a breath’s residue
To heat
The disheartened soul.

The body,
Numb with despair
Raises fair stares,
Upon the dew on the grass
That plays with the heart,
And with a small shine
Pronounces, all is fine.

Then and there,
Blissfully happy,
With the attained lies,
Life takes flight,
Into the peace like stage
Of roaming mysteries,
Forgetting what one has done.

 


— Layune, Dec 31, 2009

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Arrow

16 years 4 months ago

I think I get the gist of this

but I found it a little confusing, esp. stanza 2. I like the imagery you've chosen and think it works well and the flow is delicate and supports the images. Your final stanza is the clearest and best, I think. The title is a good one. I wouldn't have understood the poem without it.
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Layune

16 years 4 months ago

I was wondering if it would

I was wondering if it would be a bit to confusing, but in the end I decided to keep it as is. hmmm... I'm glad the title helped. I was wondering what would fit the overall message I was trying to portray and the phrase "A Firefly's Escape" just seemed to fit. Thanks for the comment