johan

Member since April 29, 2010

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HOPE . . . MY BROTHER

Posted Jun 9, 2010 · 20 lines · 2 critiques

O a downward spiral we stride
All our feelings we hide
From an early age
"Put your feelings in a cage"

All alone with your fight
Between darkness and light
Who will win the battle
That makes your world rattle

Darkness descends on your soul
Because you have no goal
But every cloud has a silver lining
And tomorrow your sun will be shining

Your coin is still spinning in flight
Darkness - Light... Darkness - Light....

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On witch side will it land
On the hourglass's sand

But you know you're strong
That darkness won't last long
For again you will stand up and fight
Driving out the darkness with your light

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June 2010
26 Sat

Received a critique
on Reality from @Candlewitch
"I think your poem needs polishing, but unfortunately, I have no advice. Always, Cat"
25 Fri

Critiqued
"I see the Sea" by @diana duncan
"just wonderfull"
25 Fri

Critiqued
"Will I miss Africa?" by @diana duncan
"i read your message before i read your poem. we showing both sides of our country here. like you said. the yin and yang of africa...... very nice poem. i think you have to live here to realy apreciate your words..... my…"
24 Thu

Received a critique
on Life costs nothing [full version] from @diana duncan
"Hi Johan. I have lived in Africa for 53 years: 26 in Rhodesia/Zimbabwe and 27 in South Africa. I have lived on farms and in small villages and in big cities and I have seen it all. Your poem is raw and it is real and I…"
23 Wed

Critiqued
"The Shaman" by @Ravenshakti
"very nice write.... i enjoy poetry like this. thank you..."
18 Fri

Received a critique
on HOPE . . . MY BROTHER from @ziggy
"hi good stuf i really like the first stanza where you say " who will win the battle that makes you world rattle when I read the second part of that line the word (that) replaced with( WHAT) seems a little better to me b…"
17 Thu

Critiqued
"YOU" by @ziggy
"this is my kind of read. very good"
09 Wed

Received a critique
on Baby girl from @greeneyes
"Lovely! Very sweet write."
09 Wed

Received a critique
on HOPE . . . MY BROTHER from @greeneyes
"Full of power! Well written. Elizabeth"
09 Wed

Posted a poem
HOPE . . . MY BROTHER
"O a downward spiral we stride"
Open thread 20 lines
09 Wed

Critiqued
"Lover In The Dark" by @greeneyes
"very good wording. it touches something inside....."
09 Wed

Critiqued
"Feed me!!" by @shazbat
"i like this. very good. simple"
09 Wed

First critique offered
on "Feed me!!" by @shazbat
07 Mon

Posted a poem
Reality
"Go through your time"
Open thread 20 lines
04 Fri

Posted a poem
Baby girl
"An innocent smile"
Open thread 12 lines
May 2010
26 Wed

Received a critique
on Life costs nothing [full version] from @scribbler
"I really like the rhyming verses separated by repeating refrain.Story starting off well, looking forward to completion....scribbler"
26 Wed

Posted a poem
Life costs nothing [full version]
"Taxi crashes and smashes"
Open thread 55 lines
24 Mon

Posted a poem
Losrtis
"From life giving water made"
Open thread 28 lines
23 Sun

Received a critique
on Taita from @magics02
"Straight from the heart I feel it.. Great poem and the out reaching of a hand is very well taken here. Shall visit once again Welcome Mona TIME well spent is TIME well lived"
23 Sun

Posted a poem
Taita
"Oh friend of mine"
Open thread 16 lines
11 Tue

Received a critique
on own self from @Ravenshakti
"This poem of yours is a true work of art... This first stanza, pulled me in: "A lonely owl calls your name on seas of rolling grass breaking surf on a cloudless night. A sound that carries through your burdens and grace…"
10 Mon

First publication
own self
10 Mon

Posted a poem
own self
"A lonely owl calls your name"
Open thread 36 lines
April 2010
28 Wed

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on Reality from @Candlewitch

"I see the Sea" by @diana duncan

"Will I miss Africa?" by @diana duncan

on Life costs nothing [full version] from @diana duncan

"The Shaman" by @Ravenshakti

on HOPE . . . MY BROTHER from @ziggy

"YOU" by @ziggy

on Baby girl from @greeneyes

on HOPE . . . MY BROTHER from @greeneyes

"Lover In The Dark" by @greeneyes

"Feed me!!" by @shazbat

on "Feed me!!" by @shazbat

on Life costs nothing [full version] from @scribbler

on Taita from @magics02

on own self from @Ravenshakti

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