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A Golden Eagle
A Golden Eagle
While working in the pasture where the waters shed,
A golden eagle swooped just over my head.
I could feel the wind from his large wings,
As he flew to a near oak by the clearings.
The size of his body was humbling to me that day,
As he preached in the tree less than halfway.
I slowly walked under the oak limb,
And looked up at him.
With the Texas sun shinning he was beautiful to behold,
It looked as if he was wrapped in feathers of pure gold,
We gawked at each other eye to eye,
He nodded his head as if in reply.
I knew from his worn feathers that he was old and wise,
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Turning his head first left then right he agreed with a sigh.
His beak and talons were scarred and large,
Perhaps from many fights and use for forage.
There I asked him of his woe,
And my words he seemed to know.
He opened his great wings as he spoke
With a shrieking loud croak,
As to say “Old fool I’ve come to see why you dig in the dirt
Not for a lecture in my life’s assert!”
With that he moved his great wings and lifted off,
Leaving me in awe with such a grand takeoff.
Surely he was indeed a wise old bird,
But had not time to waste with an old buzzard!
drachm’s timeline
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02 ThuAnniversary
5 years of membership
- December 2012
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19 WedReceived a critique
on Spring in the Texas Desert from @Esker
"my God never came to me through the spike the bottle I have driven through the desert in day and caught glimpses of it at night past a rushing van window...hoodoos.... long lit tunnels and sandstone cuts The desert is n…" -
15 SatReceived a critique
on Spring in the Texas Desert from @weirdelf
"It has few poetic values and mentiond god. Seriously, friend, read more eeally good poetry to learn more about it. Poetry is a an art, a craft, not just a description" -
11 TueReceived a critique
on A Golden Eagle from @weirdelf
"I apologise. I was once was a shaman, I understand symbols." -
10 MonReceived a critique
on A Golden Eagle from @Ian.T
"Now this means that I can put my Eagle talk on stream, lol, and the Spirit Eagle will be accepted in several quarters. I write many bits about Spirit Bears and the Eagle, though the creatures that we only know in myth m…" -
10 MonReceived a critique
on A Golden Eagle from @themoonman
"One could make the same statement about most of mankind. To think that an animal (which we are by the way) has no wisdom in their choices teeters on old caveman ideas. Of course there is thought, how else would any spec…" -
09 SunReceived a critique
on A Golden Eagle from @scribbler
"Not all narritive poetry has to relate in my opinion. But that which is most remembered usually does. One simple way to add a bit of such to this poem would be to simply change "an" to this in last line. I think that br…" -
09 SunReceived a critique
on A Golden Eagle from @Esker
"Only because I try and fail at it... Fear keeps me writing Free verse I was not trained to be a Shaman In North America one is taken along on medicine gathering ..taught songs in the original language..dance.. encourage…" -
09 SunReceived a critique
on A Golden Eagle from @weirdelf
"But I think this poem is bullshit. I agree with Roscoe and Richard that it could be written better. But what really shits me is the hubris of relating to an eagle. I am a shaman and I know they have no brain beyond a pr…" -
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@Shamoneness
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02 SatAnniversary
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- May 2008
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15 ThuPosted a poem
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May 2008 — 11 poems
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14 Wed
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14 WedCritiqued
"Desires Sweet Refrain" by @poewriter58
"Very lovely said. A most pleasant read. Love can be so tender and sweet and your poems shows this perfectly. Drachm" -
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11 SunCritiqued
"Said the Lamb" by @cricket
"How do you stop a dove from cooing or a wren from singing? Never! Drachm" -
11 SunCritiqued
"Said the Lamb" by @cricket
"I think your poem is very inspirational and just the right thing for children. Constructive criticism is always welcomed but not mixed with political and attacks on one's personal religious views. Drachm" -
11 SunCritiqued
"The gibbous moon" by @weirdelf
"Don't let the language die. English has more words than any other language---and there is a reason for it! Drachm" -
11 SunCritiqued
"Fog Scape" by @Ancientone
"You poets on the northwest coast get a lot of that foggy stuff---stay calm as the sun will come out---sometime! But I liked the poem. Drachm" -
11 SunCritiqued
"They call me names" by @weirdelf
"In Texas that is what we call straight shooting! Drachm" -
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03 SatFirst critique offered
on "Pleasures Of One" by @poewriter58
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03 SatFirst publication
The Crashing Mind (since unpublished)
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02 FriJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
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